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Food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. some people believe we should buy food from local farmer to protect the environment and support local businesses. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. some people believe we should buy food from local farmer to protect the environment and support local businesses. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Nowadays, exporting and importing food from abroad is very popular. While some believe that buying imported products is harmful for the environment and the local businesses, others think that it is beneficial for the economy. In my opinion, the consumption of local food will aid the environment and the economy of a nation, however there will be some drawbacks. Firstly, stopping the transportation of goods from a country to another is the decrease rate of pollution caused during the process. In other words, enormous amount of fossil fuels is used while exporting from one country. Therefore, air pollution will automatically be less if people stop buying imported goods. Secondly, another evident on how buying from local farmers is advantageous is that products will be more affordable and suppliers will gain more profit. To put it differently, less competitors in the market will reduce several costs such as marketing studies resulting in employing more people to help which will boost the economy. For instance, a research showed that comparing, to countries where people are encouraged to buy imported goods, countries that advertise local suppliers have a less employment rate. On the other hand, importing products from other countries provides the pupils a higher variety of goods. The climate changes from a place to another, resulting in several vegetables and fruits to non-existence of some type of food. For example, exotic fruits only grow in hot weathers where other fruits and veggies like apple and grapes need a cold climate. Hence, even though I believe that local suppliers should have preferences over international farmers, I also think that imported merchandise is essential in a market for more options. In conclusion, While there are plus points of not transporting goods from one country to another regarding the environment and expanding the local market, nevertheless, it will cause for less variety of choices to customers.
Nowadays, exporting and importing food from abroad is
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very
popular. While
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some
believe that buying
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imported
products is harmful for the environment and the
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local
businesses, others
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think
that it is beneficial for the economy. In my opinion, the consumption of
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local
food will aid the environment and the economy of a nation,
however
there will be
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some
drawbacks.

Firstly
, stopping the transportation of
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goods
from a
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country
to another is the decrease rate of pollution caused during the process. In
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other
words, enormous amount of fossil fuels is
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used
while exporting from one
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country
.
Therefore
, air pollution will
automatically
be
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less
if
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people
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stop
buying
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imported
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goods
.
Secondly
, another evident on how buying from
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local
farmers is advantageous is that products will be more affordable and suppliers will gain more profit. To put it
differently
,
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less
competitors in the market will
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reduce
several costs such as marketing studies resulting in employing more
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people
to
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help
which will boost the economy.
For instance
,
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a research
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showed
that comparing, to
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countries
where
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people
are encouraged
to
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buy
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imported
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goods
,
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countries
that advertise
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local
suppliers have a
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less
employment rate.

On the
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other
hand, importing products from
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other
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countries
provides the pupils a higher variety of
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goods
. The climate
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changes
from a place to another, resulting in several vegetables and fruits to non-existence of
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some
type of food.
For example
, exotic fruits
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only
grow in hot weathers where
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other
fruits and veggies like apple and grapes need a
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cold
climate.
Hence
,
even though
I believe that
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local
suppliers should have preferences over international farmers, I
also
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think
that
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imported
merchandise is essential in a market for more options.

In conclusion
, While there are plus points of not transporting
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goods
from one
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country
to another regarding the environment and expanding the
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local
market,
nevertheless
, it will cause for
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less
variety of choices to customers.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. some people believe we should buy food from local farmer to protect the environment and support local businesses. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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