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food travels thousand of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think that it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local produce food. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

food travels thousand of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think that it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local produce food. v. 2
Nowadays, many consumers eat foods that has been traveled thousands of miles away from their producers. Some people opine that it will be good for the economy if people only eat locally produced food. I agree with this view to a certain extent. In my opinion, consumption of regional foods will create jobs in local economy and help the environment, but if people only eat local produce food, they will have fewer choices. To begin with, local foods are beneficial not only for the economy but for the environment as well. Primarily, transportation of internationally grown foods require burning more fossil fuel and this is detrimental to the environment. Locally grown foods are rich in proteins and nutrition and free from artificial added preservatives. Regional food are much healthier and fresher as it does not consume transit facilities unlike the processed grocery food items hence there will be massive reduction in the consumption of fuel if people start preferring locally grown food. Thus, it will be beneficial for the environment. Furthermore, many people get employment in this field. Small farmers have a chance to expand globally and it increase the overall economy progression of the country. People will prosper commercially as the demand for local and regional products would remain high withstanding competition from overseas. On the other hand, eating locally produced foods alone is not viable option because there is a limit to the kind of food that can be grown in each place. For instances fruits such as apples and grapes can only be grown in cold climates. Likewise, there are so many vegetables that only grown in hot climates. There are many regions that are not suitable for cultivation. If people eat only what is available in their region, thus their choices of foods will be limited. To conclude, if people give preference to the local produce, it will certainly benefit the environment and the local economy. Even so, in my opinion, consuming locally cultivated food alone is not a viable option because it will extremely limit the food choice people have.
Nowadays,
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foods
that has
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thousands of miles away from their producers.
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opine that it will be
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economy
if
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people
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only
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eat
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locally
produced
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food
. I
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agree
with this view to a certain extent. In my opinion, consumption of regional
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foods
will create jobs in
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local
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economy
and
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help
the
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environment
,
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if
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people
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only
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eat
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local
produce
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food
, they will have fewer choices.

To
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begin
with,
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local
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foods
are beneficial not
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only
for the
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economy
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but
for the
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environment
as well
.
Primarily
, transportation of
internationally
grown
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foods
require burning more fossil fuel and this is detrimental to the
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environment
.
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Locally
grown
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foods
are rich in proteins and nutrition and free from artificial
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added
preservatives. Regional
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food
are much healthier and fresher as it does not consume transit facilities unlike the processed grocery
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food
items
hence
there will be massive reduction in the consumption of fuel if
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people
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start
preferring
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locally
grown
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food
.
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, it will be beneficial for the
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environment
.
Furthermore
,
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people
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get
employment in this field.
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Small
farmers have a chance to expand globally and it
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increase
the
overall
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economy
progression of the country.
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will prosper
commercially
as the demand for
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local
and regional products would remain high withstanding competition from overseas.

On the other hand
, eating
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locally
produced
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foods
alone is not viable option
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because
there is a limit to the kind of
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food
that can
be grown
in each place. For instances fruits such as apples and grapes can
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only
be grown
in
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cold
climates.
Likewise
, there are
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many
vegetables that
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grown in hot climates. There are
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many
regions that are not suitable for cultivation. If
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people
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eat
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only
what is available in their region,
thus
their choices of
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foods
will
be limited
.

To conclude
, if
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people
give preference to the
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local
produce, it will
certainly
benefit the
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environment
and the
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local
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economy
. Even
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so
, in my opinion, consuming
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locally
cultivated
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food
alone is not a viable option
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because
it will
extremely
limit the
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food
choice
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people
have.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay food travels thousand of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think that it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local produce food. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
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