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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: describe the training course you want to doexplain what the company could do to he v.8

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: describe the training course you want to doexplain what the company could do to he v. 8
Dear sir, I am writing this epistle to you in connection with an online advertisement which invited interested professionals to book their seat for a course called a customer service through the customer’s eyes. I think this course will be very beneficial for me to excel in my current job, therefore I am hoping that you will permit me to participate in it. In relation to the specifics of the program, it will be week-long session and will cover every important aspects of customer management including how to transform them into active advocates for service-oriented companies. Besides this, the program will be conducted by Silk-Route, a reputed human resource management company. The session will commence from 1st July and require prior booking. I am hoping that you would allow me a leave for 7 days to attend the course as they have long-day sessions. Furthermore, I am quite positive that this programme will assist me to learn a new skills and insights on customer management, which I am willing to apply in a company. Eagerly waiting for your positive response. Yours sincerely, Milan Desai.
Dear sir,

I am writing this epistle to you in connection with an online advertisement which invited interested professionals to book their seat for a course called a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
service through the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer’s
eyes. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
this course will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial for me to excel in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
job,
therefore
I am hoping that you will permit me to participate in it.

In relation to the specifics of the program, it will be week-long session and will cover every
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
aspects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
management including how to transform them into active advocates for service-oriented
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
.
Besides
this, the program will
be conducted
by Silk-Route, a reputed human resource management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

The session will commence from 1st July and require prior booking. I am hoping that you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for 7 days to attend the course as they have long-day sessions.
Furthermore
, I am quite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
that this
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programme
will assist me to learn a new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and insights on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
management, which I am willing to apply in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Eagerly
waiting for your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response.

Yours
sincerely
,

Milan
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Desai
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: describe the training course you want to doexplain what the company could do to he v. 8

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
184 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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