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Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 1
Schools should include financial education as a necessary subject in their curriculum. This essay agrees with the aforementioned statement completely because of the benefits it brings to pupils. This essay will first, discuss that it will help students to learn how to manage their day-to-day expenses and further, it will look st how students will acquire the knowledge to take mature financial and investment decisions. Imparting erudition about finances is very beneficial for institute students as they will learn from a very early age about how to take care of their costs. This is to say, if school children will be educated by the teachers about finance not only learn about the importance of saving money but also how to spend it wisely. As a result, they will develop a habit of savings and spending money in purchasing necessary and useful things rather than on unnecessary and unproductive goods and games. To elucidate, a recent study by The Times on March 2019 showed that more than 80 percent of school students when taught the usefulness of cash management, were more capable of taking care of their daily expenses. Apart from this, teaching students about fiscal management will help them to develop the understanding and knowledge of how to take financial decisions. In other words, children will have the ability and thinking level about the various schemes and options such as children's welfare schemes and kids saving bank account where the money can be invested and huge returns can be generated. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York Times showed that more than 60 percent of children after being taught about the importance of money invest their savings in children schemes. To conclude, conveying knowledge about fund administration and management to school pupils is essential because in my opinion, i vehemently agree that they will learn to take care of their spendings and will take mature monetary decisions.
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learn
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students
will acquire the knowledge to take mature financial and investment decisions.

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students
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early age about how to take care of their costs. This is to say, if
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school
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children
will
be educated
by the teachers about finance not
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learn
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saving
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money
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how to spend it
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and spending
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money
in purchasing necessary and useful things
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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school
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students
when taught the usefulness of cash management, were more capable of taking care of their daily expenses.

Apart from this, teaching
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students
about fiscal management will
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help
them to develop the understanding and knowledge of how to take financial decisions.
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children
will have the ability and thinking level about the various schemes and options such as children's welfare schemes and kids
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saving
bank account where the
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money
can
be invested
and huge returns can
be generated
. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of
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children
after
being taught
about the importance of
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money
invest their
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savings
in
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children
schemes.

To conclude
, conveying knowledge about fund administration and management to
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school
pupils is essential
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because
in my opinion,
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vehemently
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learn
to take care of their
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and will take mature monetary decisions.
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IELTS essay Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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