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Write about the following topic. It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. v.5

It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. with this? v. 5
There is no doubt that these days social events are being very important for us to gather and meet our families and friends. However, the question: Should we stop giving each other presents as sometimes they are not used? Is being a controvarsial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that these gifts are just a waste of money. One reason to say this is that people may not be in need for this kind of present or they have the same one already. Furthermore, it is also possible to say that some people cannot afford gifts becasue of financial problems or family commitments. In addition, some people invite others or even attend social events for instance: weddings and birthday parties only for courtesy so it should not be obligatory for them to bring gifts. One good illustration here are celebrations in the Kuwaiti society. These parties are being priced and too many people are feeling that it is over their budgets to afford golden gifts or sometimes diamond pieces. On the other hand, it is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. Gifts make people feel more related and close, however, they should not be expensive or luxury. Moreover, the best gift to give is money so the person can but whaever he/she needs without any embarrassment even if it a small amount like 5 Kuwaiti dinars. A particularly good example here are the stores where you can put a certain amount of money for someone and then he/she can come and get whatever is needed so no money is wasted and it can be used for useful things. This is done in Jordan, whenever you receive an invitatin for a wedding or birthday parties, a certain store will be mentioned at the bottom, so you can put a certain amount of money in this store and they can refer to it to get their gift by themselves. In conclusion, There is no easy answer to this question, however, I tend to believe that gifts should be within a specific budget in the society and it has to be either in cash or within certain stores.
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events
are being
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for us to gather and
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meet
our families and friends.
However
, the question: Should we
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stop
giving each other presents as
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sometimes
they are not
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used
? Is being a
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controvarsial
issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that these
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gifts
are
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just
a waste of
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money
. One reason to say this is that
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people
may not be in need for this kind of
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present or
they have the same one already.
Furthermore
, it is
also
possible to say that
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some
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people
cannot afford
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gifts
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becasue
of financial problems or family commitments.
In addition
,
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some
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people
invite others or even attend social
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events
for instance
: weddings and birthday parties
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only
for courtesy
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so
it should not be obligatory for them to bring
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gifts
. One
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good
illustration here are celebrations in the Kuwaiti society. These parties are
being priced
and too
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many
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people
are feeling that it is over their budgets to afford golden
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gifts
or
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sometimes
diamond pieces.

On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case.
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Gifts
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make
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people
feel more related and close,
however
, they should not be expensive or luxury.
Moreover
, the best
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gift
to give is
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money
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so
the person can
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but
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whaever
he/she needs without any embarrassment even if
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it
a
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small
amount like 5 Kuwaiti dinars. A
particularly
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good
example here are the
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stores
where you can put a
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certain
amount of
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money
for
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someone and
then he/she can
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come
and
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get
whatever
is needed
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so
no
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money
is wasted
and it can be
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used
for useful things. This
is done
in Jordan, whenever you receive an
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invitatin
for a wedding or birthday parties, a
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certain
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store
will
be mentioned
at the bottom,
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so
you can put a
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certain
amount of
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money
in this
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store and
they can refer to it to
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get
their
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gift
by themselves.

In conclusion
, There is no easy answer to this question,
however
, I tend to believe that
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gifts
should be within a specific budget in the society and it
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has to
be either in cash or within
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certain
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stores
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. with this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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