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Films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response. v.1

Films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response. v. 1
MEDIA PEOPLE DIPICTING MORE CRIME ATTEMTED BY OFFSPRINGS. THIS ESSAY CONCURE AND DISCUSS VARIOUS SOLITIONS TO TAKLE THIS PROBLEM. TO START WITH, FROM INDIVIDUAL POINT OF VIEW, CHIOLDREN DO CRIME BECAUSE OF LACK OF KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING OF LIFE. SO, PARENT SHOULD HAVE MORE CONCERN ABOUT THEIR CHILD, DO THEIR PROPER UPBRINGING AND TEACH THEM HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE SOCIETYAS WELL AS A CITIZEN. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY NEIGHBOR'S SON ATTEMTED ROBBARY WHEN HE WAS 15 YEAR OLD BECAUSE THEY DID NOT TAUGHT THEIR CHILD ABOUT BAD BEHAVIOUR AND WHAT ARE THE RESULTS OF THE CRIME. SO PARENTS PARENTS SHOULD GUIDE THEM BY BEING FRIENDLY AND OPEN-MINDED AS TODAY'S GENERATION. BY THIS THERE WILL BE A LESSER CRIMES. MOREOVER, GOVERNMENT ALSO DO SOME PROGRAMS LIKE REHABILITIATIONCEMTERS IN WHICH OFFENDERS CAN GET INFORMATION ABOIT GOOD BEHAVIOUR AND HOW TO LEAVE THEY RONG HABITS. TO ELABORATE, AUTHORITY SHOULD IMPLIMENT RULES LIKE REHABILITATION S MANDATORY FOR ALL CRIMINALS AND FOR ANYKIND OF CRIMES. FOR AN INSTANCE, IF ONE IS A MURDERER AND OTHER HAVE DONE ROBBARY THAT THERE ARE NO EXCEMPTION FOR RUBBERS JUST BECAUSE THEY ARE JUST A THIEF. BY THIS WHO AL ARE ALREADY GOT A NAME PLAYTE OF CRIMINALS CAN HAVE A CHANCE OF BEING RESPONSIBLE MEMBER OF THE NATION. IN ADDITION TO THIS, ALSO THERE SHOPULD BE SOME RESTRICTIONS FOR MEDIAN PEOPLE. TO ILLUSTRATE, LAWS IN WHICH THEY HAVE THE BOUNDRIES AND DUTYIES MENTION. SO THAT THEY KNOW WHICH NEW THEY CAN PUBLISH AND WHAT NOT. FOR AN EXAMPLE, OF THEY GET NEWS ABOUT ONE SCHOOLER HHAS DONE SOME THIEFT. THEN THEY ARE NOT ALLOWED TO TELECAST THIS NEWS ON THE TELEVISION. BECAUSE IT WILL INFLUENCE A MANY OTHER STUDENTS TOO. BUT IF THEYB GET INFORMATION LIKE RAPE HAS ATTEMTED BY 25 YEAR OLD BOY, THIS DEFINATELY THEY SHOULD SHOW BECAUSE THIS MAKES PUBLIV AWARE OF CRIME. TO SUM UP, HOWEVER IT IS TRUE THAT MEDIA SHOULD HAVE RIGHT TO PUBLISH ANY CRIME BUT I THINK WITH JUVENILE THEY SHOULD BE MORE CAREFFUL ABOUT WHEN AND WHTA TO SHOW. EVRYONE IS RESPONSIBLE TO MAKE SOME CHANGES IN THE COUNTRY.
MEDIA
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PEOPLE
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DIPICTING
MORE
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CRIME
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ATTEMTED
BY
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OFFSPRINGS
. THIS ESSAY
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CONCURE
AND DISCUSS VARIOUS
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SOLITIONS
TO
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TAKLE
THIS PROBLEM.

TO
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START
WITH, FROM INDIVIDUAL POINT OF VIEW,
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CHIOLDREN
DO
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CRIME
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BECAUSE
OF LACK OF KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING OF LIFE.
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SO
, PARENT SHOULD HAVE MORE CONCERN ABOUT THEIR CHILD, DO THEIR PROPER UPBRINGING AND TEACH THEM HOW TO BE A
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GOOD
MEMBER OF THE
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SOCIETYAS
WELL AS A CITIZEN. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY NEIGHBOR'S SON
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ATTEMTED
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ROBBARY
WHEN HE WAS 15 YEAR
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OLD
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BECAUSE
THEY DID NOT
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TAUGHT
THEIR CHILD ABOUT
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BAD
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BEHAVIOUR
AND WHAT ARE THE RESULTS OF THE
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CRIME
.
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SO
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PARENTS PARENTS
SHOULD GUIDE THEM BY BEING FRIENDLY AND OPEN-MINDED AS
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TODAY
'S GENERATION. BY THIS THERE WILL BE A LESSER CRIMES.

MOREOVER
,
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GOVERNMENT
ALSO
DO
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SOME
PROGRAMS LIKE
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REHABILITIATIONCEMTERS
IN WHICH OFFENDERS CAN
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GET
INFORMATION
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ABOIT
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GOOD
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BEHAVIOUR
AND HOW TO
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LEAVE
THEY
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RONG
HABITS. TO ELABORATE, AUTHORITY SHOULD
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IMPLIMENT
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RULES
LIKE REHABILITATION S MANDATORY FOR ALL CRIMINALS AND FOR
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ANYKIND
OF
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CRIMES
. FOR AN INSTANCE, IF ONE IS A MURDERER AND OTHER HAVE DONE
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ROBBARY
THAT THERE ARE NO
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EXCEMPTION
FOR RUBBERS
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JUST
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BECAUSE
THEY ARE
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JUST
A THIEF. BY THIS WHO AL ARE ALREADY
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GOT
A NAME
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PLAYTE
OF CRIMINALS CAN HAVE A CHANCE OF
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BEING RESPONSIBLE
MEMBER OF THE NATION.

IN ADDITION
TO THIS,
ALSO
THERE
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SHOPULD
BE
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SOME
RESTRICTIONS FOR MEDIAN
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PEOPLE
. TO ILLUSTRATE, LAWS IN WHICH THEY HAVE THE
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BOUNDRIES
AND
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DUTYIES
MENTION.
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SO
THAT THEY KNOW WHICH NEW THEY CAN PUBLISH AND WHAT NOT. FOR AN EXAMPLE, OF THEY
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GET
NEWS ABOUT ONE SCHOOLER
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HHAS
DONE
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SOME
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THIEFT
. THEN THEY ARE NOT
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ALLOWED
TO TELECAST THIS NEWS ON THE TELEVISION.
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BECAUSE
IT WILL INFLUENCE A
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MANY
OTHER STUDENTS TOO.
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BUT
IF
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THEYB
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GET
INFORMATION LIKE RAPE HAS
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ATTEMTED
BY 25 YEAR
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OLD
BOY, THIS
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DEFINATELY
THEY SHOULD
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SHOW
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BECAUSE
THIS
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MAKES
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PUBLIV
AWARE OF CRIME.

TO SUM UP,
HOWEVER
IT IS TRUE THAT MEDIA SHOULD HAVE RIGHT TO PUBLISH ANY
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CRIME
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BUT
I
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THINK
WITH JUVENILE THEY SHOULD BE MORE
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CAREFFUL
ABOUT WHEN AND
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WHTA
TO
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SHOW
.
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EVRYONE
IS RESPONSIBLE TO
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MAKE
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SOME
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CHANGES
IN THE COUNTRY.
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IELTS essay Films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
354 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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