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Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extent do you agree with this? v.2

Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. v. 2
In this modern world, governments have been issuing laws to protect the local farmers by putting a high rate of import duty taxes. It is stated by some politicians and authorities that those policies and regulations are essential. I totally agree with this statement in order to the improvement of the local products and decreasing the products’ prices. First of all, since the beginning of humanity, farming has been a part of individuals lives and countries’ economy. Moreover, the first need for every person is vegetables, which produce from farmers inland. In fact, if governments do not guarantee that development of local farming, a huge number of people would face an economic crisis. Moreover, to prevent this undesirable situation, lawmakers and responsible authorities should take enough actions. For instance, if they increase the import duty and customs fees for imported groceries, their prices would be higher, and citizens’ demand would be directed to local productions. In other words, it contributes not only citizens and farmers, but also countries by increasing gross domestic products’ value. On the other hand, even if many countries have agreements between each other to trade for groceries or any materials, all countries only care about their citizens and close the borders in any time pandemic or other disaster happened. Moreover, if governments support their local producers and increase their production capacity, the countries will never encounter with lack of vegetables. Furthermore, in this manner, the responsibilities and liabilities of governments and chambers are higher, due to that reason, they should announce their problems with the related authorities and press the parliament to issue a law to decrease fuel rates for farmers. In conclusion, in my opinion, I am strongly convinced that governments should protect the local farmers by issuing sufficient restrictions on tariffs. Also, I believe that countries which have powerful and innovative farmer have an economic power globally.
In this modern world,
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governments
have been issuing laws to protect the
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local
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farmers
by putting a high rate of import duty taxes. It
is stated
by
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some
politicians and authorities that those policies and regulations are essential. I
totally
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agree
with this statement in order to the improvement of the
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local
products and decreasing the products’ prices.

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First of all
, since the beginning of humanity, farming has been a part of individuals
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lives
and
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countries’
economy.
Moreover
, the
first
need for every person is vegetables, which produce from
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farmers
inland. In fact, if
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governments
do not guarantee that development of
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local
farming, a huge number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would face an economic crisis.
Moreover
, to
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prevent
this undesirable situation, lawmakers and responsible authorities should take
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enough
actions.
For instance
, if they increase the import duty and customs fees for imported groceries, their prices would be higher, and citizens’ demand would
be directed
to
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local
productions. In
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other
words, it contributes not
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only
citizens and
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farmers
,
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but
also
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countries
by increasing gross domestic products’ value.

On the
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other
hand, even if
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many
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countries
have agreements between each
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other
to trade for groceries or any materials, all
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countries
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only
care about their citizens and close the borders in any time pandemic or
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other
disaster happened.
Moreover
, if
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governments
support their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
producers and increase their production capacity, the
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countries
will never encounter with lack of vegetables.
Furthermore
, in this manner, the responsibilities and liabilities of
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governments
and chambers are higher, due to that reason, they should announce their problems with the related authorities and press the parliament to issue a law to decrease fuel rates for farmers.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, I am
strongly
convinced that
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governments
should protect the
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local
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farmers
by issuing sufficient restrictions on tariffs.
Also
, I believe that
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countries
which have powerful and innovative
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farmer
have an economic power globally.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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