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Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs- that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policy are necessary and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extend do you agree with this? v.1

Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs- that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policy are necessary and should be implemented wherever possible. v. 1
Entry into university irrespective of socioeconomic status has always been a controversial topic, besides controversies the alarming question is that whether tertiary education is even accessible to all the students or not? I agree with the statement and believe that it has become extremely hard for the students to even enter university owing to the disproportion in the student number and seat availability, compounded with increased percentage of scholars and fee structure. To begin with, in recent decades the secondary school graduated student numbers has tremendously increased, resulting in asymmetry between the eligible students and available seats. This difference creates burden on the university management, compelling them to raise the standards of eligibility. For instance, in 2018, India, 1 million students graduated from schools, whereas the seats available is only around 0. 1 million, statistically making a student entry hard to a university. Furthermore, despite making academic standards high, the management also demanded huge amounts as compensation to allocate particular seats. Hence, making it unapproachable for the students of both high and low socioeconomic groups. For example, according to a recent article in TIMES newspaper, it is mentioned that, university fee has sky rocketed meaning it costs a life for the student’s parents to afford a university seat globally, either it could be a developed country or a developing country. To conclude, finally having studied so hard for years with good grades, still the students are unable to be sure of entering a top university, irrespective of their economical status to fulfil their dream. Thus, strengthening my argument that financial status does not play a key role in obtaining a student access to university.
Entry into
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university
irrespective of socioeconomic status has always been a controversial topic,
besides
controversies the alarming question is that whether tertiary education is even accessible to all the
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students
or not? I
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agree
with the statement and believe that it has become
extremely
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hard
for the
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students
to even enter
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university
owing to the disproportion in the
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student
number and
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seat
availability, compounded with increased percentage of scholars and fee structure.

To
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begin
with, in recent decades the secondary school graduated
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student
numbers has
tremendously
increased, resulting in asymmetry between the eligible
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students
and available
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seats
. This difference creates burden on the
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university
management, compelling them to raise the standards of eligibility.
For instance
, in 2018, India, 1 million
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students
graduated from schools, whereas the
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seats
available is
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only
around 0. 1 million,
statistically
making a
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student
entry
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hard
to a university.

Furthermore
, despite making academic standards high, the management
also
demanded huge amounts as compensation to allocate particular
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seats
.
Hence
, making it unapproachable for the
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students
of both high and low socioeconomic groups.
For example
, according to a recent article in TIMES newspaper, it
is mentioned
that,
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university
fee has
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sky rocketed
meaning it costs a life for the
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student’s
parents to afford a
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university
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seat
globally, either it could be a
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developed country
or a
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developing country
.

To conclude
,
finally
having studied
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so
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hard
for years with
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good
grades,
still
the
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students
are unable to be sure of entering a top
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university
, irrespective of their
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economical
status to fulfil their dream.
Thus
, strengthening my argument that financial status does not play a key role in obtaining a
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student
access to
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university
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs- that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policy are necessary and should be implemented wherever possible. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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