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Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? Give your suggestion on how to solve this problem. v.5

Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? Give your suggestion on how to solve this problem. v. 5
It is irrefutable that people know about endangered animals and plants but do not take enough efforts to save them. I will ashed light upon the reasons why people are so indifferent towards these problems and some suggestions in the following paragraph. There are variety of reasons why human beings are doing so. Firstly, people nowadays very busy and they are running mad in rat race of material comforts and working hard to achieve them. They have become victims of consumerist society. They do not have time to care about plants and animals. Even they do not realise the true value of flaura and fauna. for exemplify, individuals become more money minded as compared to the past decade. They use different types of pesticides to rise profit from crops. As a result, they lost many friendly insects such as bat, which is very useful for the farmers to control harmful insects. Moreover, the individuals copy the culture of different nations as well as changed their lifestyle and give more preference to eat meat of different species of animals. Furthermore, the increasing population is another reason. To fulfill the desires of community, more space is required. So, individuals cut the trees to expand the living area. Hence, many species of animals become homeless. In addition, with the increasing industry sector and pollution, many types of plants and animals are reached at extinct level. On the other hand, there are some suggestions to tackle with this problem. The first measure is that the government creates more awareness among community by the help of media such as documentary programs on TV and Internet. Secondly, the government should take strict action towards the hunters and should give hard punishment. Thirdly, to provide more funds to the scientist to increase the breeding of endangered species of animals. Fourthly, individuals make their own social groups to save the environment and also flaura and fauna. To sum up, it is the main responsibility of each and every individual to protect our animals and plants. They can do it when they control upon our comforts and if the government issue strict rules and regulations towards the protection and safety of these species.
It is irrefutable that
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people
know about endangered
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animals
and
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plants
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but
do not take
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enough
efforts to save them. I will
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ashed
light upon the reasons why
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people
are
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so
indifferent towards these problems and
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some
suggestions in the following paragraph.

There are variety of reasons why human beings are doing
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so
.
Firstly
,
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people
nowadays
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very
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busy and
they are running mad in rat race of material comforts and working
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hard
to achieve them. They have become victims of consumerist society. They do not have time to care about
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plants
and
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animals
. Even they do not
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realise
the true value of
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flaura
and fauna.
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for
exemplify,
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individuals
become more money minded as compared to the past decade. They
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use
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different
types of pesticides to rise profit from crops.
As a result
, they lost
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many
friendly insects such as bat, which is
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very
useful for the farmers to control harmful insects.

Moreover
, the
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individuals
copy the culture of
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different
nations
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
their lifestyle and give more preference to eat meat of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
species of
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animals
.
Furthermore
, the increasing population is another reason. To fulfill the desires of community, more space
is required
.
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So
,
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individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
the trees to expand the living area.
Hence
,
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many
species of
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animals
become homeless.
In addition
, with the increasing industry sector and pollution,
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many
types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and
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animals
are reached
at extinct level.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions to tackle with this problem. The
first
measure is that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
creates more awareness among community by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of media such as documentary programs on TV and Internet.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take strict action towards the hunters and should give
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
punishment.
Thirdly
, to provide more funds to the scientist to increase the breeding of endangered species of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
Fourthly
,
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individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
social groups to save the environment and
also
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flaura
and fauna.

To sum up, it is the main responsibility of each and every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
to protect our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
. They can do it when they control upon our comforts and if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
issue strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations towards the protection and safety of these species.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? Give your suggestion on how to solve this problem. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
364 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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