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Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? v.2

Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? v. 2
Nowadays, plenty of flora and fauna are demised because of humans’ activities. Nations might be informed why these creatures’ safety are endangered for many decades, but the lack of enough information and a shortage of budget may be the leading reasons why this issue has not been addressed. I personally believe that governments should take responsibility more to solve it. To begin with, one important reason is that people are not appropriately notified via media. Clearly, the best source of information is news or some documentary programmes shown on television or the Internet; however, unfortunately, their coverage is not sufficient. In particular, billions of fishes died in Persian Gulf Sea during Iran-Iraq war from 1982 to 1989 due to oil spillage, while no organisation became responsible in giving enough data to people. Had citizens of Iran known more about it, more practical implementations would have applied by the related organisations or individuals. Therefore, to solve similar accidents, it is essential that the local media work more closely with the related sectors to inform viewers and find more phenomenal solutions to prohibit such devastating environmental disasters. Another factor is scarce of the needed funds for having better proactive strategies. Obviously, to raise the safety of wildlife, administrations must spend a remarkable amount of money to protect vegetations or animals. For example, the US government was better to escalate the funds needed for the protection of extinct mammals which were hunted by poachers during last three decades. As a result, international organisations should value more livestock and plants and push state authorities to spend more money on the protection of these creatures. In conclusion, although nations know about the extinction of live creatures, more actions are needed. From my perspective, each medium must expose more the consequences of this problem to the public than before, and international organisations must be more active to elevate the needed funds for expansion of this protection.
Nowadays,
plenty of flora
and fauna
are demised
because
of humans’ activities. Nations might
be informed
why these creatures’ safety
are endangered
for
many
decades,
but
the lack of
enough
information and a shortage of budget may be the leading reasons why this issue has not
been addressed
. I
personally
believe that
governments
should take responsibility more to solve it.

To
begin
with, one
important
reason is that
people
are not
appropriately
notified via media.
Clearly
, the best source of information is news or
some
documentary
programmes
shown on television or the Internet;
however
, unfortunately, their coverage is not sufficient.
In particular
, billions of fishes
died
in Persian Gulf Sea during Iran-Iraq war from 1982 to 1989 due to oil spillage, while no
organisation
became responsible in giving
enough
data to
people
. Had citizens of Iran known more about it, more practical implementations would have applied by the related
organisations
or individuals.
Therefore
, to solve similar accidents, it is essential that the local media work more
closely
with the related sectors to inform viewers and find more phenomenal solutions to prohibit such devastating environmental disasters.

Another factor is scarce of the
needed
funds for having better proactive strategies.
Obviously
, to raise the safety of wildlife, administrations
must
spend a remarkable amount of money to protect
vegetations
or animals.
For example
, the US
government
was better to escalate the funds
needed
for the protection of extinct mammals which
were hunted
by poachers during last three decades.
As a result
, international
organisations
should value more livestock and plants and push state authorities to spend more money on the protection of these creatures.

In conclusion
, although nations know about the extinction of
live
creatures, more actions are
needed
. From my perspective, each medium
must
expose more the consequences of this problem to the public than
before
, and international
organisations
must
be more active to elevate the
needed
funds for expansion of this protection.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why do people do so little about it? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
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