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Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement v.4

Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education with this statement v. 4
Most countries expect their citizens to pay tax for public universal education. Some households might not have children or might send their children to private-run schools. However, they are forced to pay taxes to support state education which leads them to believe they should not. Schools, in general, require a tremendous amount of funds to function smoothly. Public schools managed by the government depend solely on the taxes of its citizen. Most of the students in public schools come from low-income families and therefore cannot afford private-funded schools. If government schools were to shut down, the students will not be able to acquire an education. This, in turn, would cause inequality among the young children of the nation. Taxes are a method to contribute to society in a constructive way for infrastructure, research and development. Individuals should not refuse to pay tax merely because they are not using the government service. For instance, many do not use public transport as they own a private vehicle. This does not mean they could be exempt from paying those taxes. A good government funded education system leads to a well informed and knowledgeable country. One of the major reasons for the increase in literacy rate in western countries is due to their universal education system. This affects the country' s overall development and boosts its economy and thereby increasing the standard of living of a nation. In conclusion, the government should be responsible for providing a well-rounded education to its people and financially support them when needed.
Most
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countries
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expect
their citizens to pay
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tax
for
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public
universal
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education
.
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Some
households might not have children or might
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send
their children to private-run
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schools
.
However
, they
are forced
to pay
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taxes
to support state
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education
which leads them to believe they should not.

Schools,
in general
, require a tremendous amount of funds to function
smoothly
.
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Public
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schools
managed by the
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government
depend
solely
on the
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taxes
of its citizen. Most of the students in
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public
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schools
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come
from low-income families and
therefore
cannot afford private-funded
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schools
. If
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government
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schools
were to shut down, the students will not be able to acquire an
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education
. This, in turn, would cause inequality among the young children of the nation.

Taxes are a method to contribute to society
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in a constructive way
for infrastructure, research and development. Individuals should not refuse to pay
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tax
merely
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because
they are not using the
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government
service.
For instance
,
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many
do not
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use
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public
transport as they
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own
a private vehicle. This does not mean they could be exempt from paying those taxes.

A
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good
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government
funded
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education
system leads to a
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well informed
and knowledgeable
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country
. One of the major reasons for the increase in literacy rate in western
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countries
is due to their universal
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education
system. This affects the
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country&
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overall
development and boosts its economy and thereby increasing the standard of living of a nation.

In conclusion
, the
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government
should be responsible for providing a well-rounded
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education
to its
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people
and
financially
support them when needed.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education with this statement v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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