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Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 3
Over the years, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of vehicles on the road. This has reduced the quality of air in major cities. Vehicular pollution also leads to several health problems. Obviously, this is a major problem that needs to be solved. If we really want to control air pollution, we need to reduce the number of cars on the road. This is not possible without proper legislation. In some countries, a family can own only one car. In my opinion, governments all over the world should enact similar laws. If we can prevent rich families from buying more and more cars, we will be able to reduce the number of vehicles on the road. Controlling car ownership alone will not solve the problem. Cars have a shelf life. Older cars cause more pollution than newer cars. So, we also need legislation that forbids people from driving vehicles older than 10 years. Creating awareness among the public is equally important. People need to be made aware of the environmental impact of vehicles. Legislation won’t fix the problem if there are no viable alternatives. Fortunately, plenty of them exist. Public transport is the alternative to private cars. The government should invest more money in public transport systems. If buses and trains arrive on time, very few people will want to drive to work. Carpooling and cycling are also good solutions. We also need to develop cities where people can walk to work. To conclude, we must control vehicular congestion and pollution before the situation goes out of control. It is evident that we require new legislation and regulations to control this situation. We must also opt for better alternatives like public transport and cycling.
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need
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reduce
the number of
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some
countries, a family can
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governments
all over the world should enact similar laws. If we can
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prevent
rich families from buying more and more
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cars
, we will be able to
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reduce
the number of vehicles on the road.

Controlling
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car
ownership alone will not solve the
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problem
.
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Cars
have a shelf life. Older
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cars
cause more
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pollution
than newer
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cars
.
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legislation that forbids
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people
from driving vehicles older than 10 years. Creating awareness among the
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public
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transport is the alternative to private
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cars
. The
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government
should invest more money in
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public
transport systems. If buses and trains arrive on time,
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few
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people
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to develop cities where
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people
can walk to work.

To conclude
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control
vehicular congestion and
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pollution
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before
the situation goes out of
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control
. It is evident that we require new legislation and regulations to
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control
this situation. We
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must
also
opt for better alternatives like
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public
transport and cycling.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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