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Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v.4

Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 4
It is common knowledge that roads getting busier every year. This problem is touching every big city around the world. The numbers of cars reduce the quality of air in major cities. In this essay I will suggest some solution which may reduce the problem of increasing number of the cars on the road. Firstly, the problem of crowded roads is the problem of modern world. These days every nuclear family has at least one car. In this case I believe that government should create a law that force people to have no more than one car per family. This would have positive impact on the increasing traffic on the roads and decreasing quality of air. Secondly, to reduce number of cars on the road people should be aware of the bad impact of the cars on the environment. The pollution created by the cars is even worst than created by the factory industry. People should be encouraging by government to use public transport. For instance, the government should invest more money in public transport system. If the buses and trains arrive on time, a few people will want to drive to work. Moreover, carpooling and cycling are also good solutions but only very few people are using these types of transport. In conclusion, we must control the number of vehicles on the roads before the situation goes out of control. This problem has been neglected for many years, and now we have to take serious action to reduce problem of pollution and increasing traffic on the road.
It is common knowledge that
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roads
getting busier every year. This
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problem
is touching every
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big
city around the world. The
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numbers
of
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cars
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reduce
the quality of air in major cities. In this essay I will suggest
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some
solution which may
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reduce
the
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problem
of increasing
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number
of the
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cars
on the road.

Firstly
, the
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problem
of crowded
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roads
is the
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problem
of modern world. These days every nuclear family has at least one
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car
.
In this case
I believe that
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government
should create a law that force
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people
to have no more than one
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car
per family. This would have
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positive
impact on the increasing traffic on the
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roads
and decreasing quality of air.

Secondly
, to
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reduce
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number
of
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cars
on the
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road
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people
should be aware of the
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bad
impact of the
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cars
on the environment. The pollution created by the
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cars
is even
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worst
than created by the factory industry.
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People
should be encouraging by
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government
to
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use
public transport.
For instance
, the
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government
should invest more money in public transport system. If the buses and trains arrive on time, a few
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people
will want to drive to work.
Moreover
, carpooling and cycling are
also
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good
solutions
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but
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only
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very
few
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people
are using these types of transport.

In conclusion
, we
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must
control the
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number
of vehicles on the
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roads
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before
the situation goes out of control. This
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problem
has
been neglected
for
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many
years, and
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now
we
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have to
take serious action to
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reduce
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problem
of pollution and increasing traffic on the
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road
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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