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46. What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

46. What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
There is not a single trait which make a child a good Son/Daughter but it is a cluster of qualities such as being responsible, staying punctual, and obeying parents etc. In my point of view, the quality which is marks a good Son/Daughter has more or less remained constant throughout times. I believe this for two reasons. First, Obeying Parents is consider as a sign of a good Son/Daughter. in fact, it is consider a excellent trait for youngsters as children are obedient at young age they are less likely to misbehave with their parents which in long run helps them as they can get comfortable with their parents and open the channel of communication. For instance, if a child is rebellious from the beginning it is difficult to put cogent argument and convince him to forgo his arrogance and just listen for once which in turn leads to have a caustic relationship with his parents and elders. Therefore obedience is a minor but very important quality for a Son/Daughter should have in order to have a successful relationship with his parents and this trait will remain and is unlikely to change in near future. Secondly, " being responsible" is one of the founding stones of good qualities, if a child shows responsible behaviour from a very early stage it lucidly shows that how much good potential the child has and is often consider a good quality. For instance, responsible children never abandon their parents and anyone who needs them they instead help which is an excellent quality for a Son/Daughter to have so they can have. These traits are two of many good qualities which a good Son/Daughter should have and these traits have not change since ages as they are very immanent in nature
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such as being responsible, staying punctual, and obeying
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parents
etc. In my point of view, the
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quality
which is marks a
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good
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Son/Daughter
has more or less remained constant throughout times. I believe this for two reasons.

First
, Obeying
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Parents
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.
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for youngsters as children are obedient at young age they are less likely to misbehave with their
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parents
which in long run
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them as they can
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comfortable with their
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and open the channel of communication.
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, if a
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child
is rebellious from the beginning it is difficult to put cogent argument and convince him to forgo his arrogance and
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listen for once which in turn leads to have a caustic relationship with his
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important
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for a
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should have in order to have a successful relationship with his
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parents
and this
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will remain and is unlikely to
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in near future.

Secondly
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potential the
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which is an excellent
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to have
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they can have.

These
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are two of
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should have and these
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have not
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since ages as they are
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay 46. What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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