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In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v.2

In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v. 2
As the popularity of the internet is growing, online courses are available large in the number. Some people hold the opinion that it is a great opportunity, whereas other people have conflicting views and as per them, classroom teaching is most essential. In my viewpoint, both the methods have its pros and cons which I will try to enunciate below in my essay. Since online courses have certain advantages, indubitably, it is getting popular among the students. Firstly, because of the internet, they can study wherever they like, even they can study at a friend’s place. Online course provides flexible options and the students can study at their own pace and as per their convenient time. Moreover, can review study materials as many times as they wish. In the classroom study, whenever they have any queries and questions they contact teachers, in the online courses also they can connect with the tutors either through emails or the bulletin boards. On the contrast, there are many detrimental effects of online courses. First and foremost, it is not easily accessible and not convenient for everyone to afford the expenses of the internet growing charges. Additionally, classroom study offers practical session which is not possible in an online course. For example, theory classes on the chemistry subject can be studied online, but to gain the practical knowledge classroom study is a must. Online students lack access to the college facilities such as a library and even the social aspects of face to face contact with teachers and classmates. To conclude, along with the advantages online course have certain disadvantages which one cannot ignore
As the popularity of the internet is growing,
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online
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courses
are available large in the number.
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Some
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people
hold the opinion that it is a great opportunity, whereas other
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people
have conflicting views and as per them, classroom teaching is most essential. In my viewpoint, both the methods have its pros and cons which I will try to enunciate below in my essay.

Since
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online
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have certain advantages,
indubitably
, it is getting popular among the students.
Firstly
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because
of the internet, they can
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study
wherever they like, even they can
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study
at a friend’s place.
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Online
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course
provides flexible options and the students can
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study
at their
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own
pace and as per their convenient time.
Moreover
, can review
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study
materials as
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many
times as they wish. In the classroom
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study
, whenever they have any queries and questions they contact teachers, in the
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online
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courses
also
they can connect with the tutors either through emails or the bulletin boards.

On the contrast, there are
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detrimental effects of
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online
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.
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and foremost, it is not
easily
accessible and not convenient for everyone to afford the expenses of the internet growing charges.
Additionally
, classroom
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study
offers practical session which is not possible in an
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online
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course
.
For example
, theory classes on the chemistry subject can
be studied
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online
,
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but
to gain the practical knowledge classroom
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study
is a
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.
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students lack access to the college facilities such as a library and even the social aspects of face to face contact with teachers and classmates.

To conclude
, along with the advantages
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course
have certain disadvantages which one cannot
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IELTS essay In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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