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Every year, more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. Why are students choosing to study online? What can universities do to attract students back to campus? v.3

Every year, more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. Why are students choosing to study online? What can universities do to attract students back to campus? v. 3
The revolution in digital technology during the past decade changed the way the education is delivered. Students are increasingly choosing to take up online academic programs due to various factors. This has resulted in a decrease in the number of students getting admitted in college or university. Students find online courses to be convenient as they can choose their topics of interest and can study at their own pace. Students need not to travel to university or college and can save precious time to invest in something more productive. Moreover, online courses enable working class people to complete their course during their free time without any impact to their daily work routine. Digital learning can be beneficial as students can spend quality time with their family while learning online. Increasing popularity among students towards digital learning affected the traditional way of learning on a campus to some extent, and it is evident by observing the significant decrease in the number of students joining educational institutions during the recent academic years. To encourage students to attend a course at campus, educational institutions should take few measures such as providing flexible class schedule, allowing students to take up a part-time employment. Also, offering tailored curriculum to suit individual needs and aspirations of students will attract the aspiring students to join the campus. To summarize, digital learning, without any doubt has certain positive aspects which offer students more convenience and flexibility. The educational institutions should recognize this and make necessary amendments to their syllabus and other regulations to attract more students to join their campuses.
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increasingly
choosing to take up online academic programs due to various factors. This has resulted in a decrease in the number of
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students
getting admitted in college or university.

Students find online
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to be convenient as they can choose their topics of interest and can study at their
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own
pace.
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Students
need not
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to university or college and can save precious time to invest in something more productive.
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, online
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courses
enable working
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class
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people
to complete their
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course
during their free time without any impact to their daily work routine. Digital
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learning
can be beneficial as
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students
can spend quality time with their family while
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learning
online.

Increasing popularity among
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students
towards digital
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learning
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affected
the traditional way of
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learning
on a campus to
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some
extent, and it is evident by observing the significant decrease in the number of
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students
joining educational institutions during the recent academic years. To encourage
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students
to attend a
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course
at campus, educational institutions should take few measures such as providing flexible
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class
schedule, allowing
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students
to take up a part-time employment.
Also
, offering tailored curriculum to suit individual needs and aspirations of
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students
will attract the aspiring
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students
to
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join
the campus.

To summarize
, digital
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learning
, without any doubt has certain
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positive
aspects which offer
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students
more convenience and flexibility. The educational institutions should recognize this and
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make
necessary amendments to their syllabus and other regulations to attract more
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students
to
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join
their campuses.
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IELTS essay Every year, more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. Why are students choosing to study online? What can universities do to attract students back to campus? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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