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Every year more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.2

Every year more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 2
Ever since the industrial revolution, mass-produced goods have flooded the consumer market. Although such goods have proven to be highly popular, it is now becoming increasingly clear that handmade goods are more desirable for modern, informed consumers. In this essay, I will look at some of the ethical and quality-based reason for this re-evaluation. To begin with, handmade goods can be made with extra attention to detail than mass-produced goods. This is because the machine lacks a sensitivity that sophisticated craftsmen possess. For example, a study conducted by the International Consumerist Society found that handmade furniture, musical instrument, jewelry was consistently rated as being more attractive than their mass made counterparts. Therefore, it is clear that buyers prefer handmade goods for a number of reasons that relate to the quality of workmanship. Secondly, handmade companies have far more ethical attitudes towards the environment. This is because factories and chemical heavily underpin mass industrial production. For example, the British Green Party found that the levels of toxicity and environmental damage outside the handmade production centers were paltry compared to the levels found outside the factories used for mass production. Consequently, since modern consumers are more environmentally conscious than ever before. These findings have clearly contributed to their preference for handmade goods. In conclusion, there are outstanding reasons why modern consumers prefer handmade goods. In the future, as environmental issues worsen, this preference will no doubt grow more pronounced.
Ever since the industrial revolution, mass-produced
goods
have flooded the
consumer
market. Although such
goods
have proven to be
highly
popular, it is
now
becoming
increasingly
clear
that
handmade
goods
are more desirable for modern, informed
consumers
. In this essay, I will look at
some of the
ethical and quality-based reason for this re-evaluation.

To
begin
with,
handmade
goods
can
be made
with extra attention to detail than mass-produced
goods
. This is
because
the machine lacks a sensitivity that sophisticated craftsmen possess.
For example
, a study conducted by the International Consumerist Society found that
handmade
furniture, musical instrument, jewelry was
consistently
rated as being more attractive than their mass made counterparts.
Therefore
, it is
clear
that buyers prefer
handmade
goods
for a number of reasons that relate to the quality of workmanship.

Secondly
,
handmade
companies
have far more ethical attitudes towards the environment. This is
because
factories and chemical
heavily
underpin mass industrial production.
For example
, the British Green Party found that the levels of toxicity and environmental damage outside the
handmade
production centers were paltry compared to the levels found outside the factories
used
for mass production.
Consequently
, since modern
consumers
are more
environmentally
conscious than ever
before
. These findings have
clearly
contributed to their preference for
handmade
goods
.

In conclusion
, there are outstanding reasons why modern
consumers
prefer
handmade
goods
. In the future, as environmental issues worsen, this preference will no doubt grow more pronounced.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Every year more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 2

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237 words
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