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Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 3
Meat is part of the majority of the world population’s diet. More than half of the global population consumes or has consumed meat at least once in their lives. Lately, new research and movements started to shape the way people eat, which increased the number of vegetarian diets worldwide. This point of view claims that a meat based diet can cause health problems. However, in my opinion, there is not enough evidence to support this statement. According to research, consuming meat on a daily basis can increase the risk of cancer, diabetes or heart diseases. This is due to the fact that meat is rich in fat. Indeed, processed meat contains shocking high levels of fat and its intake is never recommended. Fat causes cholesterol in blood rise, which is built around vessels and could increase the possibility of suffering a stroke. Although there is a correlation regarding meat consumption and the previously mentioned diseases, there is not enough evidence to state there is a cause-effect relationship. In fact, consuming a healthy level of meat has some advantages. Meat contains high levels of proteins which help to retain muscle mass. Moreover, it can boost energy levels and support a strong immune system. For instance, by consuming meat one intakes vitamin b1 and b12, which stimulates immune defences and reduces the risk of infections. Additionally, it is important to keep a healthy diet alongside a healthy lifestyle. By doing exercise one can burn the fat contained in meat and reduce the risk of getting any of the previously mentioned complications. All in all, a meat based diet can also be healthy. It is important to reduce the intake of processed meat which contains high levels of fat and attach to a balanced diet plan which helps to improve our health alongside healthy habits.
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Meat
is part of the majority of the world population’s diet. More than half of the global population consumes or has consumed
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meat
at least once in their
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lives
. Lately, new research and movements
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started
to shape the way
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people
eat, which increased the number of vegetarian diets worldwide. This point of view claims that a
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meat
based diet can cause health problems.
However
, in my opinion, there is not
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enough
evidence to support this statement.

According to research, consuming
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meat
on a daily basis can increase the
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risk
of cancer, diabetes or heart diseases.
This is due to the fact that
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meat
is rich in
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fat
.
Indeed
, processed
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meat
contains shocking high
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levels
of
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fat
and its intake is never recommended.
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Fat
causes cholesterol in blood rise, which
is built
around vessels and could increase the possibility of suffering a stroke. Although there is a correlation regarding
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meat
consumption and the previously mentioned diseases, there is not
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enough
evidence to state there is a cause-effect relationship.

In fact, consuming a
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healthy
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level
of
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meat
has
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some
advantages.
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Meat
contains high
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levels
of proteins which
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help
to retain muscle mass.
Moreover
, it can boost energy
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levels
and support a strong immune system.
For instance
, by consuming
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meat
one intakes vitamin b1 and b12, which stimulates immune
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defences
and
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reduces
the
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risk
of infections.
Additionally
, it is
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important
to
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keep
a
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healthy
diet alongside a
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healthy
lifestyle. By doing exercise one can burn the
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fat
contained in
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meat
and
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reduce
the
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risk
of getting any of the previously mentioned complications.

All in all, a
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meat
based diet can
also
be
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healthy
. It is
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important
to
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reduce
the intake of processed
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meat
which contains high
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levels
of
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fat
and attach to a balanced diet plan which
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helps
to
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improve
our health alongside
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healthy
habits.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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