Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 1
Becoming vegetarian has become a trend nowadays where many people are turning vegetarian just because others do the same. Some people believe that non-vegetarian food have a negative effect on health. I do not agree with this as I believe that all food has its own nutritional values. This essay will discuss the reasons why both vegetarian and non-vegetarian foods are essential in the diet. In order to maintain good and healthy life, one must consume a balanced diet. Balanced diet means including all essential nutrients, vitamins, proteins, carbs and healthy fats in food that we eat all day. Although vegetarian food can provide all these things, there are some nutrients which can only be obtained through meats and fish. For instance, eggs and meats are a great source of proteins which is very essential in one's life. Replacing this through vegetarian diet is very difficult and hence people start using supplements to balance it. Several medicines that are available in markets contains fish oil. These are very useful for strong bones and immunity. Consuming fish will help with these nutrients and improve overall health. Though eating meat in excess can cause problems, eating them in a behaved manner will only help. In conclusion, even if many believe that non-vegetarian food can cause health issues, there are various positive facts about consuming them which cannot be neglected.
Becoming vegetarian has become a trend nowadays where
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are turning vegetarian
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
others do the same.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that non-vegetarian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on health. I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this as I believe that all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
nutritional values. This essay will discuss the reasons why both vegetarian and non-vegetarian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
are essential in the diet.

In order to maintain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and healthy life, one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
consume a balanced diet. Balanced diet means including all essential nutrients, vitamins, proteins, carbs and healthy fats in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
that we eat all day. Although vegetarian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
can provide all these things, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
nutrients which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be obtained
through meats and fish.
For instance
, eggs and meats are a great source of proteins which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
essential in one's life. Replacing this through vegetarian diet is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult and
hence
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
using supplements to balance it.

Several medicines that are available in markets contains fish oil. These are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful for strong bones and immunity. Consuming fish will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with these nutrients and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
overall
health. Though eating meat in excess can cause problems, eating them in a behaved manner will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

In conclusion
, even if
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
believe that non-vegetarian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
can cause health issues, there are various
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
facts about consuming them which cannot
be neglected
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
A new language is a new life.
Persian Proverb

IELTS essay Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
227 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts