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Every health should have a free health service,even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive.

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 7
Health is fundamental right of every human being. Some people argue that, health provision should offers by government at free of cost to their inhabitants of a country. I agree with this statement and it is impossible for government to pry advanced medical treatment to people without any charges. This essay will explain my viewpoints regarding this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, health facilities should give to people at free of charge by government. First and foremost is health is wealth. If the heath department would able to provide free medical services or health information to residents of nation then people can lead heathly lifestyle. It would wise decision for country. For example, healthy people more productive than others and contribute to development of country. Besides it, may helps to prevent epidemic from spreading. If individuals would aware about helath issues than they would definitely pay attention towards their fitness. Hence, the government should provide basis health treatments. On the other hand, there aare many reasons which supporting the government to impossible to provide latest medical treatments. First of all, if government decides to fund such expensive services free of cost. It would put huge burden on economy of nation. It may force to people pay maor taxes. as a result, it indirectly comes on individuals. Secondly, some diseases do not need for special treatment at initial stage. For instance, a diabetic person can treat by basis treatment at initial stage. However, if it is not diagonsed then it can lead with complications such as stroke. Then, the need of expensive treatment for treatment. The wealthy people easily pay for them but poor people can not afford it. Hence, the government should provide some special treatments with possible ways. In conclusion, no doubts, health is essential for everyone. The government should avail basis medicines or treatments for people so that they live healthy life.
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argue that,
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provision should
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of cost to their inhabitants of a country. I
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agree
with this statement and it is impossible for
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government
to pry advanced medical
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treatment
to
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people
without any charges. This essay will
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explain
my viewpoints regarding this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
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health
facilities should give to
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people
at
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free
of charge by
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government
.
First
and foremost is
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health
is wealth. If the heath department
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would able
to
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provide
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free
medical services or
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health
information to residents of nation then
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people
can lead
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heathly
lifestyle. It would wise decision for country.
For example
, healthy
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people
more productive than others and contribute to development of country.
Besides
it, may
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helps
to
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prevent
epidemic from spreading.
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If
individuals would aware about
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helath
issues than they would definitely pay attention towards their fitness.
Hence
, the
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government
should
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provide
basis
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health
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treatments
.
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aare
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many
reasons which supporting the
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to impossible to
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provide
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medical
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treatments
.
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First of all
, if
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government
decides to fund such expensive services
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free
of cost. It would put huge burden on economy of nation. It may force to
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people
pay
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maor
taxes.
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as
a result, it
indirectly
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comes
on individuals.
Secondly
,
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some
diseases do not need for special
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treatment
at initial stage.
For instance
, a diabetic person can treat by basis
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treatment
at initial stage.
However
, if it is not
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diagonsed
then it can lead with complications such as stroke. Then, the need of expensive
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treatment
for
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treatment
. The wealthy
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people
easily
pay for them
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but
poor
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people
can not afford it.
Hence
, the
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government
should
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provide
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some
special
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treatments
with possible ways.
In conclusion
, no doubts,
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health
is essential for everyone. The
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government
should avail basis medicines or
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treatments
for
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people
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so
that they
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live
healthy life.
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IELTS essay Every health should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
316 words
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