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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.2

Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? v. 2
Nowadays, modern technology has increased considerably. Time and effort saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers and laptops have made life even easier and comfortable. In this essay, I will discuss the problems and suitable solutions of these modern devices. Technology has gone up to a whole new level. Today, dishwashers and computers are become necessary in every house. Every house has atleast one of these. Although, dishwashers save a lot of time and effort of mankind, it has somehow made a person lazy. The invention of computers was considered a boom to technology until people started getting addicted to social networking sites. For example, if a person hosts a party for 40-50 people, dishwashers are considered to be a blessing, as it helps clean the dishes faster and without much effort. Similarly, for computers, people can connect to far away relatives faster through the Internet. However, all dishes cannot be put in the dishwasher, some need to be washed by hand as well. If people learn to limit the use of computers, it will be helpful for them. In today’s world, every second person experiences stress, be it children or adults. Another problem of dishwashers is that, it sometimes doesn’t wash properly and sometimes it breaks glass plates and bowls. Increased use of computers can lead to damaged eyesight. Too much screen time should be avoided. For instance, Children at a very young age have spectacles due to computers and mobile phones. Steel cannot be put in the dishwasher; it will automatically stop working or may get spoilt. The only solutions to these problems are to wash vessels by hand and limit the use of computers. If all this is followed, it will indirectly lead to less stress and happier lives. In conclusion, despite the various problems associated with these modern devices, people cannot avoid them and their existing because they are so used to them, that they think they cannot do without them.
Nowadays, modern technology has increased
considerably
. Time and effort saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers and laptops have made life even easier and comfortable. In this essay, I will discuss the
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problems
and suitable solutions of these modern devices.

Technology has gone up to a whole new level.
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Today
, dishwashers and computers
are become
necessary in every
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house
. Every
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house
has
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atleast
one of these. Although, dishwashers save
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a lot of
time and effort of mankind, it has somehow made a person lazy. The invention of computers
was considered
a boom to technology until
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people
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started
getting addicted to social networking sites.
For example
, if a person hosts a party for 40-50
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people
, dishwashers
are considered
to be a blessing, as it
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helps
clean the dishes faster and without much effort.
Similarly
, for computers,
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people
can connect to far away relatives faster through the Internet.
However
, all dishes cannot
be put
in the dishwasher,
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some
need to
be washed
by hand
as well
. If
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people
learn to limit the
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use
of computers, it will be helpful for them.

In
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today
’s world, every second person experiences
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stress
, be it children or adults. Another
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problem
of dishwashers is that, it
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sometimes
doesn’t wash
properly
and
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sometimes
it breaks glass plates and bowls. Increased
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use
of computers can lead to damaged eyesight. Too much screen time should
be avoided
.
For instance
, Children at a
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very
young age have spectacles due to computers and mobile phones. Steel cannot
be put
in the dishwasher; it will
automatically
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stop
working or may
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get
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spoilt
. The
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only
solutions to these
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problems
are to wash vessels by hand and limit the
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use
of computers. If all this
is followed
, it will
indirectly
lead to less
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stress
and happier
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lives
.

In conclusion
, despite the various
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problems
associated with these modern devices,
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people
cannot avoid them and their existing
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because
they are
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so
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used
to them, that they
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think
they cannot do without them.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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