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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.4

Nowadays, wealthy countries offer a great service on healthcare for their people free of charge. However, some new developed pricey treatments in the hospital may not be available for free. There has been an ongoing argument that each country must be required to have an access to health facilities at no cost. In this essay, I will discuss my favor to this topic. I agree that countries all over the world should establish such service to improve the quality of poeple's lives, especially those who are poor and who cannot prioritize health over other financial obligation. In my country, Philippines, where health is not one of the priorities, many people cannot afford to have a chance in sustaining a better and improved life. The well-being of my poor fellow countrymen is debilitating because they have no consistent access to healthcare because they think that it is expensive. These people work and make just enough money or sometimes still insufficient to feed their family, therefore making health a less priority to them. It would be great to have a program about giving an access to health facility free of charge to give most especially those less unfortunate families a well improved health and fitness. It would be wonderful for all to gain a good value of life by means of getting an entry to a health service without even thinking about the cost of the treatment. In conclusion, an open healthcare resources should be established in each country to help their people to a better quality of life.
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offer a great service on healthcare for their
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facilities at no cost. In this essay, I will discuss my favor to this topic.

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countries
all over the world should establish such service to
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those who are poor and who cannot prioritize
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health
over other financial obligation. In my
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country
, Philippines, where
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health
is not one of the priorities,
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many
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people
cannot afford to have a chance in sustaining a better and
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life. The well-being of my poor fellow countrymen is debilitating
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they have no consistent access to healthcare
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work and
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money or
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sometimes
still
insufficient to feed their family,
therefore
making
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health
a less priority to them. It would be great to have a program about giving
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an access
to
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health
facility free of charge to give most
especially
those less unfortunate families a well
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improved
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health
and fitness. It would be wonderful for all to gain a
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good
value of life by means of getting an entry to a
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health
service without even thinking about the cost of the treatment.

In conclusion
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be established
in each
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country
to
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help
their
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people
to a better quality of life.
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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