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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.30

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 30
According to some people, free health care should be provided to all by every nation, even though the latest medical treatments are not affordable by the health service system due to exorbitant cost. I firmly agree with this thought as basic health care should be available to every citizen of a country without any cost. Firstly, it is the responsibility of every nation to provide preliminary medical services to all its citizens. A state cannot lay its claim as people friendly if it cannot even provide the basic medical services for the needy. Few countries are already successful in implementing this. For instance, countries like England, Canada and France, provide free health care to all its citizens. These countries can afford this scheme, by efficiently collecting the taxes from its people. When people realize the benefit, they wouldn't mind contributing to the country's finances in the form of taxes. Secondly, it is the fundamental right of every individual of a nation to have free access to the medical facilities provided by the country. Moreover, the government should provide the basic medical facilities for free so that people from all walks of life can benefit out of it. The more costly medical procedures should be provided at a subsidised rate to the people based on their income. If the government doesn't have control over the medical costs, only a few private corporations would enjoy the benefit. For example, the expensive medical costs in the United States of America provide an idea of what will happen when the state doesn't have much control over the medical system. In conclusion, it is the duty of the government to provide free medical services to its people. It also should manage its finances to make sure the costly medical procedures are available to the people at a reduced cost based on their income. The government should always act keeping all its citizens in its mind and take action for the common good of its people.
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,
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health
care should
be provided
to all by every nation,
even though
the latest
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medical
treatments are not affordable by the
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health
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service
system due to exorbitant
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cost
. I
firmly
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agree
with this
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thought
as basic
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health
care should be available to every
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citizen
of a
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country
without any cost.

Firstly
, it is the responsibility of every nation to
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provide
preliminary
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medical
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services
to all its
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citizens
. A state cannot lay its claim as
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people
friendly if it cannot even
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provide
the basic
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medical
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services
for the needy. Few
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countries
are already successful in implementing this.
For instance
,
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countries
like England, Canada and France,
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provide
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free
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health
care to all its
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citizens
. These
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countries
can afford this scheme, by
efficiently
collecting the taxes from its
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people
. When
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people
realize the benefit, they wouldn't mind contributing to the country's finances in the form of taxes.

Secondly
, it is the fundamental right of every individual of a nation to have
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free
access to the
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medical
facilities provided by the
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country
.
Moreover
, the
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government
should
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provide
the basic
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medical
facilities for
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free
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so
that
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people
from all walks of life can benefit out of it. The more costly
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medical
procedures should
be provided
at a
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subsidised
rate to the
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people
based on their income. If the
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government
doesn't have control over the
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medical
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costs
,
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only
a few private corporations would enjoy the benefit.
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, the expensive
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medical
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costs
in the United States of America
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provide
an
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idea
of what will happen when the state doesn't have much control over the
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medical
system.

In conclusion
, it is the duty of the
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government
to
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provide
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free
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medical
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services
to its
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people
. It
also
should manage its finances to
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make
sure the costly
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medical
procedures are available to the
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people
at a
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reduced
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cost
based on their income. The
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government
should always act keeping all its
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citizens
in its mind and take action for the common
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good
of its
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people
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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