Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.28

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 28
In contemporary times, health is wealth. Moreover, well-being has been given quite a high preference by many developed countries such as Canada and Australia; they are providing free healthfulness services to all of their citizens. In my opinion, giving this facility brings positive vibes to the community. This writing will shed some light on the plausible reasons behind supporting the aforementioned policy. To begin with, providing body checkups without any cost, gives mental peace to society. People who are struggling to earn their livelihood, do not need to be concerned about their medical expenses. To exemplify, in many developing countries like India, quite a few people can not buy medicines for even their children and they get stressed out in their lives. Additionally, people who are insured with said facilities are willing to take more financial risks and thus end up having more returns which eventually make their motherland more prosperous. Hence, such benefits are logically a win-win situation for everyone, even if they are not covering expensive treatments. Secondly, free wellbeing facilities spread positivity in society. When any country is caring for its people, they are more grateful to return to their home country. For example, in a survey conducted in Australia, 98% of people have shown their gratitude for their government which proves the significance for the same. Moreover, people having respect for their motherland have respect for their citizens and this feeling of happiness and joyfulness have a rippling effect. For instance, people in Canada are highly generous and they feel sorry if the other person is mistaken. Thus, every nation should provide free health services. To recapitulate, no-cost fitness policies by government influence people positively. This led to better efficiency of people and enhanced their gratitude for returning to their motherland. Therefore, every nation should implement such policies.
In contemporary times, health is wealth.
Moreover
, well-being has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
quite a high preference by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
such as Canada and Australia; they are providing free healthfulness services to all of their citizens. In my opinion, giving this facility brings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
vibes to the community. This writing will shed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
light on the plausible reasons behind supporting the aforementioned policy.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, providing body checkups without any cost, gives mental peace to society.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
who are struggling to earn their livelihood, do not need to
be concerned
about their medical expenses. To exemplify, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
like India, quite a few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
medicines for even their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
children and
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
out in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
Additionally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
are insured
with said facilities are willing to take more financial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
and
thus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up having more returns which
eventually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their motherland more prosperous.
Hence
, such benefits are
logically
a win-win situation for everyone, even if they are not covering expensive treatments.

Secondly
, free
Possible spelling mistake found.
wellbeing
facilities spread positivity in society. When any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
is caring for its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, they are more grateful to return to their home
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
For example
, in a survey conducted in Australia, 98% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have shown their gratitude for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
which proves the significance for the same.
Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
having respect for their motherland have respect for their citizens and this feeling of happiness and joyfulness have a rippling effect.
For instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in Canada are
highly
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
generous and
they feel sorry if the other person
is mistaken
.
Thus
, every nation should provide free health services.

To recapitulate, no-cost fitness policies by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
influence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
positively
. This led to better efficiency of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and enhanced their gratitude for returning to their motherland.
Therefore
, every nation should implement such policies.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts