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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case. what isn the most importing thing to do succeed in life? v.15

Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case. what isn the most importing thing to do succeed in life? v. 15
IT IS OFTEN BELIEVED THAT HARD WORK IS THE KEY TO SUCCESS. WHEN CERTAIN PEOPLE FAIL DURING THEIR SECONDARY OR PRIMARY STUDIES, BUT THEY MIGHT GET THE SUCCESS IN THE LATER LIVELINESS. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW FAILING EXPERIENCE CONTRIBUTE TO OBTAIN A VICTORY FURTHER AND SECONDLY, ACCORDING TO ME, HOW PASSION FOR WORK CAN END YOU UP WITH THE HUGE TRIUMPH. ON THE ONE HAND, WHEN WE FAILED IN SOMETHING ONCE IN LIFE, FOR THE NEXT ATTEMPT, INDIVIDUAL DO NOT HAVE FEAR TO FAIL AGAIN AS HE KNOWS HE CAN MAKE IT SUCCESSFUL. HOWEVER, SOMETIME IT DOES MAKE AN INDIVIDUAL FEEL LOOSER, BUT WITH CONFIDENCE AND FAITH IN HARD WORK CAN DECLINE SUCH FEELING. FOR EXAMPLE, ON OF THE FAMOUS SCIENTIST IS THE WELL KNOWN PERSON AROUND THE WORL TODAY. NONETHELESS, HE WAS VERY BAD DURING HIS SCHOOLING TIME. ON THE OTHER HAND, I BELIEVED, WHEN PERSON HAS ENOUGH DEDICATION, HE CAN ACHIEVE ANY ACCOMPLISHMENT IN LIFE AS HE KNOWS HOW TO DEAL WITH OBSTACLES AND HAVE CRITIVAL THINKING POWER. CONSEQUENTLY, DEVOTION GIVE A STENGTH TO EXPERIMENT WITHOUT BEING FURIOUS. AS A RESULT, PERSON WOULD GAIN FAME. FOR INSTANCE, A VERY YOUNG BUSINESMAN OF THE INDIA SAID IN THE INTERVIEW THAT HE HAD A CURIOSITY TO KNOW ABOUT HOW TO DO BUSINESS AND HOW TO SUCCEED IN IT THAT MADE HIM YOUNGEST SUCCESSFUL BUSINESSMAN IN THE PRESENT TIME. ALTHOUGH, SOME TIME OVERLY PASSION MAY PUT YPU IN THE WRONG DECISION WHICH MIGHT RUIN YOUR LIFE TOO. IN CONCLUSION, HARD WORK AND PASSION INDEED CONSIDER AS A KEY STRENGTH FOR VISTORY IN ANY FIELD. NEVERTHELESS, THIS COULD NOT BE POSSIBLE WITHOUT ANY MORRAL SUPPORT. HENCE, TO HAVE RIGHT SUPPORT, INDIVIDUAL NEEDS A PERFECT PERSOIN TO GUIDE THROUGHOUT THE PROCESS OF ACHIVEING VICTORY THEN THE SURLEY THE TRIUMPH IS HIS.
IT IS
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OFTEN
BELIEVED THAT
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HARD
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WORK
IS THE KEY TO SUCCESS. WHEN CERTAIN
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PEOPLE
FAIL DURING THEIR SECONDARY OR PRIMARY STUDIES,
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BUT
THEY MIGHT
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GET
THE SUCCESS IN THE LATER LIVELINESS.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW FAILING EXPERIENCE CONTRIBUTE TO OBTAIN A VICTORY
FURTHER
AND
SECONDLY
, ACCORDING TO ME, HOW PASSION FOR
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WORK
CAN
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END
YOU UP WITH THE HUGE TRIUMPH.

ON THE ONE HAND, WHEN WE FAILED IN SOMETHING ONCE IN LIFE, FOR THE
NEXT
ATTEMPT, INDIVIDUAL DO NOT HAVE FEAR TO FAIL AGAIN AS HE KNOWS HE CAN
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MAKE
IT SUCCESSFUL.
HOWEVER
, SOMETIME IT DOES
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MAKE
AN INDIVIDUAL FEEL LOOSER,
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BUT
WITH CONFIDENCE AND FAITH IN
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HARD
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WORK
CAN DECLINE SUCH FEELING.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ON OF THE
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FAMOUS
SCIENTIST IS THE WELL KNOWN PERSON AROUND THE
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WORL
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TODAY
. NONETHELESS, HE WAS
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VERY
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BAD
DURING HIS SCHOOLING TIME.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, I BELIEVED, WHEN PERSON HAS
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ENOUGH
DEDICATION, HE CAN ACHIEVE ANY ACCOMPLISHMENT IN LIFE AS HE KNOWS HOW TO DEAL WITH OBSTACLES AND HAVE
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CRITIVAL
THINKING POWER.
CONSEQUENTLY
, DEVOTION GIVE A
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STENGTH
TO EXPERIMENT WITHOUT BEING FURIOUS.
AS A RESULT
, PERSON WOULD GAIN FAME.
FOR INSTANCE
, A
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VERY
YOUNG
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BUSINESMAN
OF THE INDIA SAID IN THE INTERVIEW THAT HE HAD A CURIOSITY TO KNOW ABOUT HOW TO DO BUSINESS AND HOW TO SUCCEED IN IT THAT MADE HIM
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YOUNGEST
SUCCESSFUL BUSINESSMAN IN THE PRESENT TIME. ALTHOUGH,
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SOME
TIME
OVERLY
PASSION MAY PUT
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YPU
IN THE
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WRONG
DECISION WHICH MIGHT RUIN YOUR LIFE TOO.

IN CONCLUSION
,
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HARD
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WORK
AND PASSION
INDEED
CONSIDER AS A KEY STRENGTH FOR
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VISTORY
IN ANY FIELD.
NEVERTHELESS
, THIS COULD NOT BE POSSIBLE WITHOUT ANY
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MORRAL
SUPPORT.
HENCE
, TO HAVE RIGHT SUPPORT, INDIVIDUAL NEEDS A PERFECT
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PERSOIN
TO GUIDE THROUGHOUT THE PROCESS OF
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ACHIVEING
VICTORY THEN THE
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SURLEY
THE TRIUMPH IS HIS.
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IELTS essay Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case. what isn the most importing thing to do succeed in life? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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