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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.19

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 19
Now a day’s new deceases are discovering after every short period, which shoved the nations on the globe to aid Medical care without any cost regardless innovation in medical support might did not reachable for a person because of the higher expense and I am with the humanity to must have free medical service. Government medical cares hold higher effect on their running generation fitness because this will allow them to control the disease before it caught someone else. Many countries in the world who is not accompanied with better medical facilities passing through the several scenarios with the health of the people. Moreover, free medical care allows the health centre with the statistics of their current generation as well as to discover new decease and control over it. Imagine if you did not have the free medical services, then a person who cannot afford the paramedic does not able to go to the clinic. Now this will be affected not only his personal health but also the persons in his surrounding area which further allows the bacteria to spread quickly. Because of such scenario the decease became too dangerous and not killing only the people of the country but also their economy. In concluding, the government no chargeable medical policies help a lot to the country to generate a healthy environment which allows the people to run their family circuit. By having such good facilities will make country more power full ecologically, economically and raise them up above other nations in the world.
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them to control the disease
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facilities passing through the several scenarios with the health of the
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the bacteria to spread
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their economy.

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policies
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help
a lot to the
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country
to generate a healthy environment which
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allows
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to run their family circuit. By having such
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facilities will
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make
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country
more power full
ecologically
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and raise them up above other nations in the world.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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