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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.17

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 17
Health is very important for people of every country. In today’s world each person is concerned about the health of his/her loved ones. These days health related services are getting very expensive and every person cannot afford it. I agree with the above statement that every country should provide free health services to all citizens. At the outset, many people die because they do not have money to spend on their health as they are facing financial crisis or they do not have any income source. For instance, according to the report published by the USA doctors last year, 5, 290 people could not afford health services as a result they died. Additionally, people of every country pay taxes from their income to the government and thus they expect from the government. As health is a very important for every citizen, government should provide a free health service up to a limit of certain amount. Moreover, the government should provide free health services such as delivery of a child, general health care, free checkups, vaccinations and so on for the citizens, whereas there should be restrictions on expensive medical treatments such as cancer; heart attacks and so on. In a nutshell, free health services should be given to the citizens of every country by their government as many people cannot afford the medical services and it is also government who needs to look after that every citizen have the access to the health services.
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. In
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about the
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of his/her
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days
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related
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services
are getting
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expensive and every person cannot afford it. I
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with the above statement that every
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country
should provide
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free
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health
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services
to all citizens.

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people
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die
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because
they do not have money to spend on their
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health
as they are facing financial
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crisis or
they do not have any income source.
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could not afford
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health
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as a result
they
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died
.
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pay taxes from their income to the
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and
thus
they
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government
. As
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is a
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very
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for every
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citizen
,
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should provide a
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service
up to a limit of certain amount.

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, the
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government
should provide
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free
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health
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services
such as delivery of a child, general
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care,
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free
checkups, vaccinations and
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on for the
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citizens
, whereas there should be restrictions on expensive medical treatments such as cancer; heart attacks and
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so
on.

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health
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should be
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citizens
of every
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by their
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as
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many
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people
cannot afford the medical
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services
and it is
also
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government
who needs to look after that every
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have the access to the
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.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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