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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.14

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. 14
One of the most important sectors of a country is its health care sector. The quality of service they administer is dependent on how serious the government is involved in running it. I believe every country is should run a free health service. As a result of this, every citizen will have express access to health services. Even though some expensive services may not be available. Free health means more money for the citizens and reduction in death rate. Considering the amount people spend on treatments, making it free will definitely save a lot some money. Especially among those in between ages of 60 and above. It is believed that they require more medical attention, even though they earn lesser as most of them are either retired or too weak to work. Free health service can also improve a country's mortality rate. Generally, minor health issues, when left untreated, may compound to a major, which might later result in death. However, a free access to treatment will prompt an immediate reaction to any minor symptom that an individual notice. Some Organizations for example, have taken advantage of this, and most of them experience a zero loss time to accidents. Although, a free health system might mean some treatments might not be accessible due to how expensive they are, Nevertheless, alternatives can be sourced for or some very special cases can be sourced for by investing in studies and research. To conclude, I strongly agree that health should be free, while alternatives should be made for the expensive ones.
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sectors of a country is its
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care sector. The quality of
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they administer is dependent on how serious the
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government
is involved
in running it. I believe every country
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should run a
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free
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health
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.
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of this, every citizen will have express access to
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health
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services
.
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some
expensive
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services
may not be available.
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health
means more money for the citizens and reduction in death rate.

Considering the amount
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people
spend on treatments, making it
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free
will definitely save a lot
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some
money.
Especially
among those in between ages of 60 and above. It
is believed
that they require more medical attention,
even though
they earn lesser
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as
most of them are either retired or too weak to work.

Free
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health
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service
can
also
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improve
a country's mortality rate.
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, minor
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health
issues, when
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left
untreated, may compound to a major, which might later result in death.
However
, a
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free
access to treatment will prompt an immediate reaction to any minor symptom that an individual notice.
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Some
Organizations
for example
, have taken advantage of this, and most of them experience a zero loss time to accidents.

Although, a
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free
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health
system might mean
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some
treatments might not be accessible due to how expensive they are,
Nevertheless
, alternatives can
be sourced
for or
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some
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very
special cases can
be sourced
for by investing in studies and research.

To conclude
, I
strongly
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agree
that
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health
should be
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free
, while alternatives should
be made
for the expensive ones.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. 14

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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