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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.11

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 11
In the recent few decades, free health service is the most conspicuous trend in today's world. Not only this service extends human life expectancy, but also gives moral boost for better standards of living. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will explain the significance of having mandatory medical treatments for any country. Firstly, providing cost less medical treatments will reduce financial burden on low income people and acquire treatment on a wide range of medication; however, right to equality will be implemented and every citizen will be treated with similar facilities. For instance, Australian citizens get a Medicare card for their country citizens to get basic health treatments with no charge. Needless to say, many people will be benefited by cost free medical services across globe. Secondly, another possible solution, the government can reduce the burden on modern medical treatments by eliminating taxes on medical treatments. However, the government can enforce tax incentives on costly medication or tax exemption on medical insurances to improve declining mortality rate. For example, many developing countries are giving tax exemption to encourage people to take an insurance policy to reduce financial burdens. Hence, a collective approach from the government and the country residents can make free treatments achievable. In conclusion, every country should consider free medical services to every individual and help reduce declining death rate. Finally, the role of government is too dire to ignore.
In the recent few decades,
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free
health
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service
is the most conspicuous trend in
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today
's world. Not
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only
this
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service
extends human life expectancy,
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but
also
gives moral boost for better standards of living. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will
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explain
the significance of having mandatory
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medical
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treatments
for any country.

Firstly
, providing cost less
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medical
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treatments
will
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reduce
financial burden on low income
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people
and acquire
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treatment
on a wide range of medication;
however
, right to equality will
be implemented
and every citizen will
be treated
with similar facilities.
For instance
, Australian citizens
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get
a Medicare card for their
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country
citizens to
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get
basic health
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treatments
with no charge. Needless to say,
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many
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people
will
be benefited
by cost
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free
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medical
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services
across globe.

Secondly
, another possible solution, the
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government
can
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reduce
the burden on modern
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medical
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treatments
by eliminating
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taxes
on
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medical
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treatments
.
However
, the
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government
can enforce
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tax
incentives on costly medication or
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tax
exemption on
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medical
insurances to
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improve
declining mortality rate.
For example
,
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many
developing
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countries
are giving
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tax
exemption to encourage
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people
to take an insurance policy to
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reduce
financial burdens.
Hence
, a collective approach from the
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government
and the
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country
residents can
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make
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free
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treatments
achievable.

In conclusion
, every
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country
should consider
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free
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medical
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services
to every individual and
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help
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reduce
declining death rate.
Finally
, the role of
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government
is too dire to
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ignore
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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