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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.10

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 10
One of the most conspicuous trends in today’s world is that free health services should be provided to the citizens by the government. There are some people who believe that for better health and living standards every country should provide mandatory medical treatments free of cost. On the other hand, others argue that people are held responsible for their health and medical treatments are to be charged accordingly. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend this essay will explain the benefits of free treatment for well being. Firstly, there is a deluge of arguments standing before to support for this trend. One of the most preponderant is that many developed countries provide basic medical cover for their citizens under free of cost. Moreover, medical insurances are given incentives and rewards through tax exemptions to encourage medical wellbeing. For instance, researchers suggest that basic medical treatments should be free regardless of their financial background is what implemented in developing nations. Needless to say, every country should provide basic health services free of cost. Secondly, another pivotal aspect is that latest advances in the medical field can enable to reduce the cost of treatments for many deadly diseases like cancer with less money if the country can incentivise the treatment for better living. However, a small proportion of the treatment is not a burden on individuals to pay out of pocket and help many to improve their standard of living. For example, Australia provides Medicare for their citizens and tax exemptions apply for health insurances and concessions available for a wide range of treatments. Hence, government and people’s collective approach will make this service possible. In conclusion, we can conclude that both the government and the individuals can be benefittedfrom sharing approach and decrease expensive treatments price affordable and less burden.
One of the most conspicuous trends in
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today
’s world is that
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free
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health
services should
be provided
to the citizens by the
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government
. There are
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some
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people
who believe that for better
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health
and living standards every
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country
should
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provide
mandatory
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medical
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treatments
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free
of cost.
On the other hand
, others argue that
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people
are held
responsible for their
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health
and
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medical
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treatments
are to
be charged
accordingly
. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend this essay will
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explain
the benefits of
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free
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treatment
for
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well being
.

Firstly
, there is a deluge of arguments standing
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before
to support for this trend. One of the most preponderant is that
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many
developed
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countries
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provide
basic
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medical
cover for their citizens under
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free
of cost.
Moreover
,
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medical
insurances are
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given
incentives and rewards through tax exemptions to encourage
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medical
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wellbeing
.
For instance
, researchers suggest that basic
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medical
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treatments
should be
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free
regardless of their financial background is what implemented in developing nations. Needless to say, every
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country
should
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provide
basic
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health
services
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free
of cost.

Secondly
, another pivotal aspect is that latest advances in the
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medical
field can enable to
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reduce
the cost of
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treatments
for
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many
deadly diseases like cancer with less money if the
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country
can
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incentivise
the
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treatment
for better living.
However
, a
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small
proportion of the
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treatment
is not a burden on individuals to pay
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out of pocket
and
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help
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many
to
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improve
their standard of living.
For example
, Australia
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provides
Medicare for their citizens and tax exemptions apply for
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health
insurances and concessions available for a wide range of
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treatments
.
Hence
,
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government
and
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people
’s collective approach will
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make
this service possible.

In conclusion
, we can conclude that both the
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government
and the individuals can be
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benefittedfrom
sharing approach and decrease expensive
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treatments
price affordable and less burden.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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