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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.4

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? 4
Poverty exists everywhere, irrespective of the country’s status like developed, developing or under-developed. Every nation, handles them in their own way. In this essay, I will discuss the cause for this issue and ways to improve their standard of living. Unequal distribution of wealth is one main cause of poverty, the gap between poor and rich is keep on growing in our country due to this. Rich is growing richer and poor is growing poorer. Secondly, quality education has become very expensive nowadays, which further worsen the situation, as the poor community cannot really afford this type of education. This, in turn, reflects as a very big disadvantage while appearing for a job interview in a reputed company, they fail to get a good job when a candidate with good education and communication skills to compete with these kind of people. So they remain in the poverty line forever. For example, ICSE schools are charging at least 3 lakh rupees as donation and 1 lakh rupees as a yearly fee from primary classes onwards. However, we can overcome this situation if the government can support to implement new ideas. First of all a new law should be imposed to control the wealth of rich people, heavy taxes should be collected from those who are in the richer category and it should be spent for uplifting the poor kids who are denied for studies. Quality education is the key to convert the poor people to moderately rich or higher. Another area to be addressed is unemployment of graduate students. The Government should call for investments in suburban and rural areas and thereby create a lot opportunities for unemployed youths. Furthermore, Rich people should try to fund for poor person's education and create employment opportunities by networking with a help of the charity/trust. For instance, Celebrity Surya is running a trust called "agaram foundation" for helping poor students to continue their education. To conclude, it is high time to address the problem of poverty across the globe. Although we see a lot of causes for people being poor, it can be improved by taking a wise decision by the government and rich people community.
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Poverty
exists everywhere, irrespective of the country’s status like developed, developing or under-developed. Every nation,
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handles
them in their
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own
way. In this essay, I will discuss the cause for this issue and ways to
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improve
their standard of living.

Unequal distribution of wealth is one main cause of
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poverty
, the gap between
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poor
and
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rich
is
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keep
on growing in our country due to this.
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Rich
is growing richer and
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poor
is growing poorer.
Secondly
, quality
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education
has become
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very
expensive nowadays, which
further
worsen the situation, as the
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poor
community cannot
really
afford this type of
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education
. This, in turn, reflects as a
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very
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big
disadvantage while appearing for a job interview in a reputed
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company
, they fail to
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get
a
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good
job when a candidate with
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good
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education
and communication
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skills
to compete with
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these kind
of
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people
.
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So
they remain in the
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poverty
line forever.
For example
,
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ICSE
schools are charging at least 3 lakh rupees as donation and 1 lakh rupees as a yearly fee from primary classes onwards.

However
, we can overcome this situation if the
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government
can support to implement new
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ideas
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
a new law should
be imposed
to control the wealth of
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rich
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people
, heavy taxes should
be collected
from those who are in the richer category and it should
be spent
for uplifting the
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poor
kids who
are denied
for studies. Quality
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education
is the key to convert the
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poor
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people
to
moderately
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rich
or higher. Another area to
be addressed
is unemployment of graduate students. The
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Government
should call for investments in suburban and rural areas and thereby create
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a lot opportunities
for unemployed youths.
Furthermore
,
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Rich
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people
should try to fund for
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poor
person's
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education
and create employment opportunities by networking with a
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help
of the charity/trust.
For instance
, Celebrity Surya is running a trust called
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"
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agaram
foundation
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"
for helping
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poor
students to continue their education.

To conclude
, it is high time to address the problem of
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poverty
across the globe. Although we
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see
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a lot of
causes for
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people
being
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poor
, it can be
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improved
by taking a wise decision by the
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government
and
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rich
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people
community.
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IELTS essay Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? 4

Essay
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4 paragraphs
362 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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