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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 1
Even in developed countries, a degree of poverty exists. However, in many developing countries, this is a major problem, and the number of poor people continues to increase. There are various factors and these need to be addressed. ' The first issue is influencing world poverty is the current global economic system. This reinforces inequality between rich and poor people since it allows resources to be distributed unequally amongst people. In addition, the global economic system can favor the investment strategies of large transna­tional corporations, which often pay their worker's sub-standard wages. Another reason is illiteracy. Many people in different countries do not have access to education, and as a result do not learn to read or write. They are, therefore, precluded from well-paid employment and so cannot improve their living conditions. For example, people in different countries of Africa do not have more resources to study and ultimately there are peoples that are more uneducated. In order to provide help for the world's poor these problems need to be addressed. Firstly, the interna­tional community has to establish a fairer economic structure in which the wealth of each country can be shared equitably amongst its people. Moreover, all countries should make it a priority to eradicate illiteracy by providing a comprehensive learning system for all citizens so that everyone is equally capable of improving their living standards. To conclude, it can be said that poverty will probably always exist. Nevertheless, countries can take actions to reduce this by ensuring that there is a fair distribution of wealth amongst the people, and by making sure that all people have access to education.
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, a degree of poverty exists.
However
, in
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many
developing
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countries
, this is a major problem, and the number of poor
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people
continues to increase. There are various factors and these need to
be addressed
. '

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first
issue is influencing world poverty is the
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current
global economic system. This reinforces inequality between rich and poor
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people
since it
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allows
resources to
be distributed
unequally
amongst
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people
.
In addition
, the global economic system can favor the investment strategies of large transna­tional corporations, which
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often
pay their worker's sub-standard wages.

Another reason is illiteracy.
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Many
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people
in
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different
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countries
do not have access to education, and
as a result
do not learn to read or write. They are,
therefore
, precluded from well-paid employment and
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so
cannot
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improve
their living conditions.
For example
,
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people
in
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different
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countries
of Africa do not have more resources to study and
ultimately
there are
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peoples
that are more uneducated.

In order to provide
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help
for the world's poor these problems need to
be addressed
.
Firstly
, the interna­tional community
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has to
establish a fairer economic structure in which the wealth of each
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country
can
be shared
equitably
amongst its
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people
.
Moreover
, all
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countries
should
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make
it a priority to eradicate illiteracy by providing a comprehensive learning system for all citizens
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so
that everyone is
equally
capable of improving their living standards.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that poverty will
probably
always exist.
Nevertheless
,
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countries
can take actions to
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reduce
this by ensuring that there is a
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fair
distribution of wealth amongst the
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people
, and by making sure that all
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people
have access to education.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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