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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge v.3

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? 3
The idea that whether the politician or the media are having an impact on peoples’ lives has remained a source of controversy. However, while some believe that it is the media who has greater effect on peoples’ lives, I agree with those who feel that the politician have control over their way. On the one hand, it could be argued that media are having a powerful impact on human lives in certain respects. Those who support media say that mankind is aware of not only does any new product come into the market, but they also come to know where the offers are going on in the form of advertisement which are depicted on TV or on the internet and in the newspapers. Moreover, media often make it easy for humans to take scrupulously precaution through weather forecast, which means that people are able to recognize the likely scenario such as snow, rain, drought and floods. As a result, they tend to plan schedule accordingly. However, I believe that there are more arguments to suggest that politicians have profoundly control the human lives. The nation’s economy is driven by the politicians across the world. I would argue that through the yearly budget, they fix the rate of petrol, oil, gas and electricity. Consequently, people have to cope with such budgets, no matter how unpleasant it is. Furthermore, governments allocate money from countries citizens in the form of taxation in order to generate income which has been utilized for infrastructure facilities like on the increment of roads, hospitals, stations, and public places. If they use this money inappropriately, it will directly affect local citizen of the country by charging high taxation on different items. So in my opinion, it is the politicians who have an influential effect on peoples’ lives. To sum up, although people are frequently cautious for the upcoming product in the market, evolving the money in the form of taxation for the development of infrastructure is utilized for public welfare. Therefore, on balance, I believe that politicians have a strong impact on human lives.
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peoples’
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lives
has remained a source of controversy.
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lives
, I
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feel that the
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have control over their way.

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be argued
that
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media
are having a powerful impact on
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human
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lives
in certain respects. Those
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who
support
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media
say that mankind is aware of not
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only
does any new product
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come
into the market,
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but
they
also
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come
to know where the offers are going on in the form of advertisement which
are depicted
on TV or on the internet and in the newspapers.
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,
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media
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often
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make
it easy for
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humans
to take
scrupulously
precaution through weather forecast, which means that
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people
are able to recognize the likely scenario such as snow, rain, drought and floods.
As a result
, they tend to plan schedule
accordingly
.

However
, I believe that there are more arguments to suggest that
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politicians
have
profoundly
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control
the
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human
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lives
. The nation’s economy
is driven
by the
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politicians
across the world. I would argue that through the yearly budget, they
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fix
the rate of petrol, oil, gas and electricity.
Consequently
,
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people
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have to
cope with such budgets, no matter how unpleasant it is.
Furthermore
,
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governments
allocate money from countries citizens in the form of taxation in order to generate income which has
been utilized
for infrastructure facilities like on the increment of roads, hospitals, stations, and public places. If they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this money
inappropriately
, it will
directly
affect local citizen of the country by charging high taxation on
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different
items.
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So
in my opinion, it is the
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politicians
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who
have an influential effect on
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peoples’
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lives
.

To sum up, although
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people
are
frequently
cautious for the upcoming product in the market, evolving the money in the form of taxation for the development of infrastructure
is utilized
for public welfare.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe that
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politicians
have a strong impact on
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human
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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