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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v.14

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 14
The growing presence of climate change is a pressing concern today. Many individuals believe that developed countries are more responsible in terms of fighting with the climate change, while others hold the idea that every country should be equally responsible when it comes to combatting climate change. From my point of view, it is all countries' responsibility to cope with the climate change, since there is no need for high-tech equipment which can only be bought or manufactured by the developed nations. Besides, developed countries by themselves would not be enough to handle the climate change problem. First of all, although many people think that expensive high-tech equipment is needed to cope with climate changes all around the world, it is quite simple in today’s world. For instance, all nations can fight with the climate changes by just enforcing people to recycle more. In addition, governments can simply implement some laws to reduce air pollution, since air pollution is one of the most dangerous environmental problems causing climate change. It is not related with the fact whether a country is developed or not. Therefore, it is clear that all countries should be responsible for climate change. Secondly, develop countries may have better resources in terms of combatting climate change. However, developed countries by themselves would not be sufficient enough when it comes to fighting the climate change as the developing and the underdeveloped countries are outnumbered the developed nations on earth. In fact, some studies have shown that the war against the climate change can only be won if all countries unite and share their resources with each other. Thus, it cannot be argued that coping with climate change is only developed countries’ duty. To sum up, some people think that developed nations are more responsible than others in terms of combatting the climate change, while others think that all countries have the same responsibility. After a thorough analysis, it is concluded that all countries are equally responsible when it comes to fighting with the climate change.
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climate
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is a pressing concern
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today
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individuals believe that
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developed
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countries
are more
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responsible
in terms of fighting with the
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climate
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change
, while others hold the
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idea
that every
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country
should be
equally
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responsible
when it
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comes
to
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combatting
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climate
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change
. From my point of view, it is all countries' responsibility to cope with the
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climate
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change
, since there is no need for high-tech equipment which can
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only
be
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bought
or manufactured by the
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developed
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nations
.
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countries
by themselves would not be
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enough
to handle the
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problem.

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people
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that expensive high-tech equipment
is needed
to cope with
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climate
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changes
all around the world, it is quite simple in
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today
’s world.
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nations
can fight with the
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climate
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changes
by
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enforcing
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people
to recycle more.
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,
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governments
can
simply
implement
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some
laws to
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reduce
air pollution, since air pollution is one of the most
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dangerous
environmental problems causing
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climate
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change
. It is not related with the fact whether a
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country
is
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developed
or not.
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, it is
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clear
that all
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countries
should be
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responsible
for
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climate
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change
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countries
may have better resources in terms of
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combatting
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change
.
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,
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developed
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countries
by themselves would not be sufficient
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enough
when it
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comes
to fighting the
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climate
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change
as the developing and the underdeveloped
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countries
are outnumbered
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developed
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nations
on earth. In fact,
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studies have shown that the war against the
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can
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only
be won
if all
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countries
unite and share their resources with each
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other
.
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, it cannot
be argued
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people
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developed
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nations
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responsible
than others in terms of
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combatting
the
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climate
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change
, while others
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think
that all
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countries
have the same responsibility. After a thorough analysis, it
is concluded
that all
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countries
are
equally
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responsible
when it
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comes
to fighting with the
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climate
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change
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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