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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. v. 6
Museums and historical destinations have always been an attraction for people all over the world; however, it is often observed that it is only the foreigners who want to visit these places. Such sites fail to attract the attention of local. This essay shall discuss the prime reason behind this prevailing trend and suggest plausible solutions to bring locals there On the one hand, local dwellers do not want to see this tour places due to an obvious reason that is lack of interest. In other words, they have already visited and heard so much about them that they are no longer interested to spend money on such things. Moreover, they do not get any exciting experience that can motivate them to repeat their trips. For example, a local Indian, who has visited Taj Mahal for once, will not go there, even though, it is one of the seven wonders in the world. By contrast, for a foreign traveller visiting these places could be a memorable moment; native will always find it boring. Despite this, the attendance of countrymen could be encouraged by making these places more interesting and appealing to them. For this, the concerned authorities should consider organising cultural festivals and galas for the community to celebrate. Relative initiatives in Jaipur have already witnessed tremendous success. A few years ago the Rajasthan government had started organising a number of fairs in Hawa Mahal and Maharani garden, owing to this, millions of visitors come to be a part of new year celebrations each year. TO conclusion, native people have their justifiable answers for not visiting places related to history and cultures. Governments should some steps to their interest in these places.
Museums and historical destinations have always been an attraction for
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people
all over the world;
however
, it is
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often
observed that it is
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only
the foreigners who want to visit these
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places
. Such sites fail to attract the attention of
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local
. This essay shall discuss the prime reason behind this prevailing trend and suggest plausible solutions to bring
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locals
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there


On the one hand,
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local
dwellers do not want to
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see
this tour
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places
due to an obvious reason
that is
lack of interest.
In other words
, they have already visited and heard
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so
much about them that they are no longer interested to spend money on such things.
Moreover
, they do not
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get
any exciting experience that can motivate them to repeat their trips.
For example
, a
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local
Indian, who has visited Taj Mahal for once, will not go there,
even though
, it is one of the seven wonders in the world. By contrast, for a foreign
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traveller
visiting these
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places
could be a memorable moment; native will always find it boring.

Despite this, the attendance of countrymen could
be encouraged
by making these
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places
more interesting and appealing to them. For this, the concerned authorities should consider
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organising
cultural festivals and galas for the community to celebrate. Relative initiatives in Jaipur have already witnessed tremendous success. A few years ago the Rajasthan
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government
had
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started
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organising
a number of fairs in
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Hawa
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Mahal
and Maharani garden, owing to this, millions of visitors
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come
to be a part of new year celebrations each year.

TO conclusion, native
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people
have their justifiable answers for not visiting
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places
related to history and cultures.
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Governments
should
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some
steps to their interest in these
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places
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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