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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. v. 2
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue that some of the critical issues related to the environment can be tackled with the help of technology. A lion's share of society favours it, however the rest go averse it. This essay would highlight my personal opinion along with concrete evidence. Science has always been the solution to the majority of the issues. I see eye to eye with the central idea for various reasons. First and foremost science and its advancements provide us with the numerous options to choose from. Therefore with the rapid progress we can have many Eco friendly alternatives. To illustrate, many MNC's have opted for the usage of recycled papers which consequently results in reduction of trees cut to produce paper. Hence, it is a big step to prevent the eradication of environment. On the other hand, the use of chemicals for the industrial method has had a vigorous affect on this planet. Adding further this has resulted in differences in the climatic conditions in the surroundings. For instance, due to use of chemicals in factories there has been a drastic change in the temperatures, it has become hotter than earlier. This has resulted in deterioration of the environment. To recapitulate, the increasing envinonmental related issues can be solved with the help of advanced science and technology. I strongly believe that the degradation of surroundings can be reduced to some extent along with the help of booming technical inventions, but overuse of supporting elements might affect the current situation also.
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the
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issue
that
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some of the
critical
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issues
related to the environment can
be tackled
with the
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help
of technology. A lion's share of society
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favours
it,
however
the rest go averse it. This essay would highlight my personal opinion along with concrete evidence.

Science has always been the solution to the majority of the
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issues
. I
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see
eye to eye with the central
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idea
for various reasons.
First
and foremost science and its advancements provide us with the numerous options to choose from.
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Therefore
with the rapid progress we can have
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many
Eco friendly alternatives. To illustrate,
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many
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MNC
's have opted for the usage of recycled papers which
consequently
results in reduction of trees
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cut
to produce paper.
Hence
, it is a
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big
step to
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prevent
the eradication of environment.

On the other hand
, the
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use
of chemicals for the industrial method has had a vigorous
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affect
on this planet. Adding
further
this has resulted in differences in the climatic conditions in the surroundings.
For instance
, due to
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use
of chemicals in factories there has been a drastic
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change
in the temperatures, it has become hotter than earlier. This has resulted in deterioration of the environment.

To recapitulate, the increasing
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envinonmental
related
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issues
can
be solved
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of advanced science and technology. I
strongly
believe that the degradation of surroundings can be
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reduced
to
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some
extent along with the
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help
of booming technical inventions,
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but
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current
situation
also
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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