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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem? v.2

Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem? v. 2
Fast Food as the name indicates the availability of food to eat in a jiffy. The main reason for the flourish and success of fast food is the change in the lifestyle and the competitive environment prevailing in the society. Let us evaluate the success of the fast food in detail and the ways to kerb it by heeding to the sayings of the doctors, nutritionists and clinical experts. As stated, the success of fast food is mainly due to the change of the lifestyle and the competitive environment prevailing. Gone are the days when a man used to have a calm and stress-free lifestyle. The resources in the earlier days were limited and with no technological advancements man used to lead a planned lifestyle. With this planned lifestyle his eating timings and eatables were also planned, in the earlier days people having planned and stress-free lifestyles used to prefer home cooked food but the present situation is quite opposite to the earlier as people do not have time to cope up due to their busy lifestyles and unplanned schedules. This certainly draws the attention of the people to fast food outlets where availability of food is rapid and can be had without languishing much time for preparation of the same. Apart from the above-highlighted issues the taste also plays a major role in the high-end sales of the fast food for instance, people don’t tend to show interest to the tasteless, somber foods prepared in home kitchen rather they are inclined to the crispy and juicy foods which they think are tasty and lip slurping but definitely these foods ruin the health of the individual. Even though there is a distress call from the doctors to abstain people from fast food to maintain good health, many do not heed to the instruction because of the reasons as stated above. Nonetheless, it should be noted that the external force or measure can be imposed on the individual to distance themselves from fast foods but it has to be an individual consciousness created to stop fast foods. Apart from one’s own decision, people should be educated about the health problems developed due to the consumption of these fast foods. The role of food inspection and Government authorities also has to be impounded on the available fast food outlets so that these foods do not deviate from the available standard safe levels. Finally, a change in lifestyle and thinking is more necessary on the part of an individual so that they don’t deteriorate their heath showcasing changed lifestyle. In conclusion, it can be noted that it is at the level of individual perception to stop taking fast foods into the doctor's remarks that fast food is bad for peoples health. After all, health is wealth.
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as the name indicates the availability of
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food
to eat in a jiffy. The main reason for the flourish and success of
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fast
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food
is the
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change
in the
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lifestyle
and the competitive environment prevailing in the society.
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us evaluate the success of the
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fast
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food
in detail and the ways to
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by
heeding to the sayings of the doctors, nutritionists and clinical experts.

As stated, the success of
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fast
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is
mainly
due to the
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change
of the
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and the competitive environment prevailing. Gone
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are
the days when a
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man
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used
to have a calm and
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stress
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lifestyle
. The resources in the earlier days
were limited
and with no technological advancements
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man
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used
to lead a
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planned
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lifestyle
. With this
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planned
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his eating timings and eatables were
also
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, in the earlier days
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people
having
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and
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-free
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lifestyles
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used
to prefer home cooked
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food
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but
the present situation is quite opposite to the earlier as
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people
do not have time to cope up due to their busy
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lifestyles
and unplanned schedules.

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certainly
draws the attention of the
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people
to
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fast
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food
outlets where availability of
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food
is rapid and can
be had
without languishing much time for preparation of the same. Apart from the above-highlighted issues the taste
also
plays a major role in the high-
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end
sales of the
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fast
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food
for instance
,
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people
don’t tend to
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show
interest to the tasteless, somber
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foods
prepared in home kitchen
rather
they
are inclined
to the crispy and juicy
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foods
which they
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think
are tasty and lip slurping
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but
definitely these
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foods
ruin the
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health
of the individual.

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there is a distress call from the doctors to abstain
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people
from
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to maintain
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good
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health
,
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do not heed to the instruction
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because
of the reasons as stated above. Nonetheless, it should
be noted
that the external force or measure can
be imposed
on the
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individual
to distance themselves from
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fast
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foods
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but
it
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individual
consciousness created to
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. Apart from one’s
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own
decision,
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people
should
be educated
about the
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health
problems developed due to the consumption of these
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fast
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foods
. The role of
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food
inspection and
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authorities
also
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has to
be impounded
on the available
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outlets
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so
that these
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foods
do not deviate from the available standard safe levels.
Finally
, a
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change
in
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lifestyle
and thinking is more necessary on the part of an
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individual
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so
that they don’t deteriorate their heath showcasing
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changed
lifestyle.

In conclusion
, it can
be noted
that it is at the level of
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individual
perception to
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stop
taking
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fast
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foods
into the doctor's remarks that
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fast
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food
is
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bad
for
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peoples
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health
.
After all
,
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health
is wealth.
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62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
463 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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