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Essay topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to give your opinion. v.1

Essay topic: Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to give your opinion. v. 1
Pollution is an all-time high problem faced by world nations and plastic is one of the major causes. As plastic carry bags, mainly from shops, contribute a major portion of waste getting dumped in many countries, most of such nations have policies to stop the usage of these bags. I totally agree with those rules considering the detrimental effects it can cause to nature. To begin with, the main reason behind the ban of synthetic bags is that these materials do not decompose like organic materials. Therefore, authorities find it difficult to manage or recycle such waste. Secondly, the people start to obliterate plastic waste by burning them, which in turns pollute water and soil in their locality. For instance, annual environmental studies of Britian show that sea water are mainly polluted with inorganic carry bags thrown by beach strollers. Since, water, land and air are the main resources for the existence of life, it is high time to save them from getting polluted by imposing a ban on plastic. Furthermore, In some countries, shopping bags, made up of other bio-degradable materials like clothes, or low-quality plastic, is available which can be easily disposed without creating any atmospheric pollution. For example, in a mass-populated country like India, shoppers use paper cover to carry their items after shopping. Along with a ban on plastic, the India government has also implemented subsidies to encourage the manufacturing of paper bags. To sum up, in my opinion plastic shopping bags should be banned across the globe, considering the huge increase of such garbage in next few years. I would suggest people to depend on alternate methods to carry along for shopping, also not to try burning plastics.
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plastic
is one of the major causes. As
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plastic
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carry
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bags
,
mainly
from shops, contribute a major portion of waste getting dumped in
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many
countries, most of such nations have policies to
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stop
the usage of these
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bags
. I
totally
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agree
with those
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rules
considering the detrimental effects it can cause to nature.

To
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begin
with, the main reason behind the ban of synthetic
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bags
is that these materials do not decompose like organic materials.
Therefore
, authorities find it difficult to manage or recycle such waste.
Secondly
, the
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people
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start
to obliterate
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plastic
waste by burning them, which in turns pollute water and soil in their locality.
For instance
, annual environmental studies of
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Britian
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show
that sea water are
mainly
polluted with inorganic
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carry
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bags
thrown by beach strollers. Since, water, land and air are the main resources for the existence of life, it is high time to save them from getting polluted by imposing a ban on plastic.

Furthermore
, In
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some
countries,
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shopping
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bags
, made up of other bio-degradable materials like clothes, or low-quality
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plastic
, is available which can be
easily
disposed without creating any atmospheric pollution.
For example
, in a mass-populated country like India, shoppers
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use
paper cover to
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carry
their items after
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shopping
. Along with a ban on
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plastic
, the India
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government
has
also
implemented subsidies to encourage the manufacturing of paper bags.

To sum up, in my opinion
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
should
be banned
across the globe, considering the huge increase of such garbage in
next
few years. I would suggest
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people
to depend on alternate methods to
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carry
along for
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shopping
,
also
not to try burning
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plastics
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topic: Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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