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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.193

Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 193
Certain individuals opine that the best way of encouraging people to have a healthy diet is by imposing high taxes on junk food by the government. This essay strongly agrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will first, discuss that due to high taxes people will be forced to cook their meals at home and further, outline that it will help in reducing health related problems in people. It is clear that by levying heavy taxes on fast food by the government will increase the price and lower the demand. This is to say, by imposing heavy taxes will force the fast food restaurants to sell unhealthy food at high prices to customers. As a result, consumers will not be able to afford them, eventually leading them to cook healthy dishes at home. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that more than 60 percent reduction in the demand of junk food because of high taxes imposed by the political party in power. Apart from this, by taxing less nutritious food will lead to less consumption and thus people will not suffer from any issues. In other words, by eating junk food causes people to suffer from many problems such as obesity, heart problems and diabetes. Therefore, when the ministry will put heavy duties on junk food people will consume less unhealthy food and will live a healthy life with not physical and mental problems. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 80 percent of people do not suffer obesity problems from eating unhealthy food because of high tax. To conclude, the imposing of taxes on fast food will motvate people to eat a banlanced diet as it will not only increase the price of junk food making it less affordable, but its less cnsumption will prevent people from health problems
Certain individuals opine that the best way of encouraging
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people
to have a healthy diet is by imposing
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high
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taxes
on
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junk
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food
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government
. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with the aforementioned statement. This essay will
first
, discuss that due to
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high
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taxes
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people
will
be forced
to cook their meals at home and
further
, outline that it will
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help
in reducing health related
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problems
in
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people
.

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clear
that by levying heavy
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
by the
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government
will increase the price and lower the demand. This is to say, by imposing heavy
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taxes
will force the
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fast
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food
restaurants to sell unhealthy
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food
at
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high
prices to customers.
As a result
, consumers will not be able to afford them,
eventually
leading them to cook healthy dishes at home. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent reduction in the demand of
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junk
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food
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because
of
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high
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taxes
imposed by the political party in power.

Apart from this, by taxing
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less
nutritious
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food
will lead to
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less
consumption and
thus
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people
will not suffer from any issues.
In other words
, by eating
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junk
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food
causes
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people
to suffer from
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many
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problems
such as obesity, heart
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problems
and diabetes.
Therefore
, when the ministry will put heavy duties on
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junk
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food
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people
will consume
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less
unhealthy
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food
and will
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live
a healthy life with not physical and mental
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problems
. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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people
do not suffer obesity
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problems
from eating unhealthy
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food
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because
of
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high
tax.

To conclude
, the imposing of
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on
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fast
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food
will
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motvate
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people
to eat a
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banlanced
diet as it will not
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only
increase the price of
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junk
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food
making it
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less
affordable,
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but
its
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less
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cnsumption
will
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prevent
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people
from health
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problems
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IELTS essay Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 193

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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