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Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 1
It is undoubted that environmental pollution has become one of the main concerns worldwide and without appropriate strategies to stop it, our unique planet will suffer irreversible damages. Therefore, some people claim that politicians should be totally responsible for the environmental protection rather than individuals because individuals contribute too little effort to protect our habitat. However, I totally disagree with them and advocate that ordinary inhabitants play a crucial role in it. To begin with, firstly, it is obvious that politicians are the ones making strategies to reduce environmental pollution worldwide. However, it is individuals in communities to carry out them under the command or instruction of different governments. Without people's cooperation and obedience, politicians may not be able to obtain the efficacy. For example, in some metropolitans, such as Beijing, in order to reduce exhaust gases emitted from vehicles on roads, one traffic rule adopted by the local government requires citizens to drive their cars to work by turn. In order to carry out this policy, local car owners have to work hard to obey it individually. If all car owners refuse to follow it, the policy will be in vain. In addition, people play a significant role in battling environment issues. It is true that the effort of one individual sometimes is extremely little; however, it will turn into a huge one once millions of individuals work together. For example, recycling daily waste materials, such as paper or bottles, will help to protect our planet. Its efficacy will be obvious only when millions of individuals are willing to participate in recycling. If nobody or only a small portion of the inhabitants are willing to dump their daily wastes in proper groups, the strategy of recycling won't work. Therefore, the effort of an individual should not be ignored. In conclusion, politicians definitely play a crucial role in making strategies to protect the Earth; however, the effort brought by a person should not be underestimated due to his or her essential role as a unit to carry out any policy. Due to the above reasons, I personal advocate that individuals are also capable to contribute to environmental protection.
It
is undoubted
that
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environmental
pollution has become one of the main concerns worldwide and without appropriate
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strategies
to
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stop
it, our unique planet will suffer irreversible damages.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
claim that
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politicians
should be
totally
responsible for the
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environmental
protection
rather
than
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individuals
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because
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individuals
contribute too
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little
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effort
to protect our habitat.
However
, I
totally
disagree with them and advocate that ordinary inhabitants play a crucial
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role
in it.

To
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begin
with,
firstly
, it is obvious that
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politicians
are the ones making
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strategies
to
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reduce
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environmental
pollution worldwide.
However
, it is
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individuals
in communities to carry out them under the command or instruction of
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different
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governments
. Without
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people
's cooperation and obedience,
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politicians
may not be able to obtain the efficacy.
For example
, in
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some
metropolitans, such as Beijing, in order to
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reduce
exhaust gases emitted from vehicles on roads, one traffic
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rule
adopted by the local
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government
requires citizens to drive their cars to
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work
by turn. In order to carry out this policy, local car owners
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have to
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work
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hard
to obey it
individually
. If all car owners refuse to follow it, the policy will be in vain.

In addition
,
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people
play a significant
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role
in battling environment issues. It is true that the
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effort
of one
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individual
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sometimes
is
extremely
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little
;
however
, it will turn into a huge one once millions of
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individuals
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work
together.
For example
, recycling daily waste materials, such as paper or bottles, will
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help
to protect our planet. Its efficacy will be obvious
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only
when millions of
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individuals
are willing to participate in recycling. If nobody or
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only
a
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small
portion of the inhabitants are willing to dump their daily wastes in proper groups, the
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strategy
of recycling won't
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work
.
Therefore
, the
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effort
of an
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individual
should not be
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ignored
.

In conclusion
,
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politicians
definitely play a crucial
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role
in making
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strategies
to protect the Earth;
however
, the
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effort
brought by a person should not
be underestimated
due to
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his or her
essential
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role
as a unit to carry out any policy. Due to the above reasons,
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I personal
advocate that
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individuals
are
also
capable to contribute to
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environmental
protection.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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