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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 1
Nowadays, with the modernization, there have been an eclectic mix of environment-related problems. It is believed that protecting environment is the responsibility of the government because these issues are too big for individuals to control. From my perspective, both politicians and residents should involve themselves together in environmental protection processes as reasons below. To begin with, even there are more than seven billion citizens in the world with radically different skin colors, religions, traditions, we live in the same house named the Earth. Whether our home is decorated with bright lights or trashes hugely depends on humans who are supposed to be head of the world as they have predominant abilities when compared to other species. Inhibiting the world’s annihilation is the responsibility of not only the heading government but also each individual. It is undeniable that each person can only do little thing but one small action multiplied by millions can transform the world. In addition, environmental laws introduced by the government are literally useless without one’s action and awareness. The government has a pivotal role in the process of conservation: first they are alleged to lead a society, the other is their influences and regulations. However, a community is a collective whole in which a social dilemma is only solved when people involve themselves in it, which means the duties of each person are of paramount importance. It is recommended that the administration launch campaigns to broaden people’s knowledge and indicate the consequences of a polluted world. Once these campaigns are completed and underway, the habitat and biodiversity will be protected and all species will stay strong and high as a result. In conclusion, I vigorously disagree that environmental protection should be left to only the government or one single person, it needs to be joined by both. As long as humans can be together, our mother Earth will not face environmental concerns as she is currently struggling now.
Nowadays, with the modernization, there have been an eclectic mix of environment-related problems. It
is believed
that protecting environment is the responsibility of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
these issues are too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
for individuals to control. From my perspective, both politicians and residents should involve themselves together in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
protection processes as reasons below.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, even there are more than seven billion citizens in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
with
radically
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
skin colors, religions, traditions, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
named the Earth. Whether our home
is decorated
with bright lights or trashes
hugely
depends on humans who
are supposed
to be head of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
as they have predominant abilities when compared to other species. Inhibiting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world’s
annihilation is the responsibility of not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
the heading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
each individual. It is undeniable that each person can
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only
do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
thing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
action multiplied by millions can transform the world.

In addition
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
laws introduced by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
are
literally
useless without one’s action and awareness. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has a pivotal role in the process of conservation:
first
they
are alleged
to lead a society, the other is their influences and regulations.
However
, a community is a collective whole in which a social dilemma is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
solved when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
involve themselves in it, which means the duties of each person are of paramount importance. It
is recommended
that the administration launch campaigns to broaden
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s knowledge and indicate the consequences of a polluted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. Once these campaigns
are completed
and underway, the habitat and biodiversity will
be protected
and all species will stay strong and high
as a result
.

In conclusion
, I
vigorously
disagree that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
protection should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
or one single person, it needs to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
by both. As long as humans can be together, our mother Earth will not face
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
concerns as she is
currently
struggling
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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