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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals because individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals because individuals can do too little. v. 1
In the last decade, there has been an ongoing argument that politicians should take responsibility for the protection of the environment, since individuals are powerless to make a change. Although political figures should place a premium on environmental protection, individuals are to jointly share this burden. There are a number of reasons to believe that politicians play a crucial role in mitigating pollution. First, since environmental degradation is caused by heavy industrialisation, only the government has sufficient authority to hold these factories accountable. For example, by imposing environmental taxes on industries which are consuming a great deal of fossil fuel, the state can curb their carbon emission and force them to use renewable energy. Second, only the government can organise and finance, environmental movements at a large scale, which proves to be much more impactful than an individual’s effort. In fact, since no single citizen can attract enough funds as well as support for a significant change without political aid, their endeavour may be in vain. Nevertheless, individuals are set to shoulder the burden of environmental protection in tandem with politicians. First, since they are the building blocks of society, the common citizens are the driving force needed for every transformation. In fact, any environmental movement, regardless of its scale, requires the support of the public, which means that individual involvement is imperative for every significant victory in the war on pollution. Second, individuals are the most vulnerable before environmental degradation, which implies that they should be in pole position to combat it. This means that pollution puts peoples' lives in jeopardy, inducing them to make a stand and protect the environment in which their well. In conclusion, although political initiatives are of paramount importance to environmental protection, public support is not to be overlooked. Politicians and individuals should join forces for the betterment of the environment.
In the last decade, there has been an ongoing argument that
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politicians
should take responsibility for the
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protection
of the environment, since
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individuals
are powerless to
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make
a
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change
. Although political figures should place a premium on
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environmental
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protection
,
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individuals
are to
jointly
share this burden.

There are a number of reasons to believe that
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politicians
play a crucial role in mitigating pollution.
First
, since
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environmental
degradation
is caused
by heavy
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industrialisation
,
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only
the
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government
has sufficient authority to hold these factories accountable.
For example
, by imposing
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environmental
taxes on industries which are consuming a great deal of fossil fuel, the state can curb their carbon emission and force them to
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use
renewable energy. Second,
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only
the
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government
can
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organise
and finance,
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environmental
movements at a large scale, which proves to be much more impactful than an
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individual’s
effort. In fact, since no single citizen can attract
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enough
funds
as well
as support for a significant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
without political aid, their
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endeavour
may be in vain.

Nevertheless
,
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individuals
are set
to shoulder the burden of
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environmental
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protection
in tandem with
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politicians
.
First
, since they are the building blocks of society, the common citizens are the driving force needed for every transformation. In fact, any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
movement, regardless of its scale, requires the support of the public, which means that
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individual
involvement is imperative for every significant victory in the war on pollution. Second,
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individuals
are the most vulnerable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
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environmental
degradation, which implies that they should be in pole position to combat it. This means that pollution puts peoples'
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in jeopardy, inducing them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a stand and protect the environment in which their well.

In conclusion
, although political initiatives are of paramount importance to
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environmental
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protection
, public support is not to
be overlooked
.
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Politicians
and
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individuals
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
forces for the betterment of the environment.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals because individuals can do too little. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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