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Environmental problems should be solved by the government instead of individuals and private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Environmental problems should be solved by the government instead of individuals and private companies. v. 1
Environmental protection is no doubt a major issue confronting the modern society with the development of new technologies and the explosion of world population. While the issue is certainly relevant to each individual citizen and all the companies, some people contend that only the government should be concerned about protecting the environment. I concede that the government should lead the efforts in addressing the environmental problems. Nevertheless, cooperation and participation from the corporations and individual citizens are essential as well. There is no doubt that the government is the agency that should play the leading roles in solving the environmental problems. To begin with, with the power to collect taxes from individual citizens and private companies, the government have the financial resources that are necessary to deal with environmental issues. In addition, the government may formulate policies to provide incentives for the companies and individuals to reduce the amount of pollution caused by their activities. Finally, the government is the only institution that may enact laws related to environmental problems. On the other hand, without the cooperation and participation of individual citizens and private companies, the government's efforts to protect the environment would not be effective. For example, the government may launch a campaign to educate the public about the desirability of driving compact cars for reducing the air pollution. The campaign would make little difference if the individuals pay little attention to the information or do not care about the environment at all. Nor would the government's goal be achieved if the car manufacturers do not produce more compact cars for the market. In other words, the government alone cannot solve the problem of environment. It takes the collaborative efforts from individual and corporate citizens to improve the situation. In conclusion, I agree that the government should take the responsibility to lead the society in addressing the problems of environmental pollution as it has the power and resources necessary to do so. Nonetheless, individual citizens and private companies have to be engaged if the government is to accomplish anything.
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Environmental
protection is no doubt a major issue confronting the modern society with the development of new technologies and the explosion of world population. While the issue is
certainly
relevant to each
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individual
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citizen
and all the
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companies
,
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some
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people
contend that
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only
the
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government
should
be concerned
about protecting the environment.

I concede that the
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government
should lead the efforts in addressing the
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environmental
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problems
.
Nevertheless
, cooperation and participation from the corporations and
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individual
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citizens
are essential
as well
.

There is no doubt that the
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government
is the agency that should play the leading roles in solving the
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environmental
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problems
. To
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begin
with, with the power to collect taxes from
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individual
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citizens
and private
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companies
, the
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government
have the financial resources that are necessary to deal with
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environmental
issues.
In addition
, the
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government
may formulate policies to provide incentives for the
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companies
and
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individuals
to
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reduce
the amount of pollution caused by their activities.
Finally
, the
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government
is the
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only
institution that may enact laws related to
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environmental
problems.

On the other hand
, without the cooperation and participation of
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individual
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citizens
and private
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companies
, the
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government
's efforts to protect the environment would not be effective.
For example
, the
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government
may launch a campaign to educate the public about the desirability of driving compact cars for reducing the air pollution. The campaign would
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make
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little
difference if the
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individuals
pay
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little
attention to the information or do not care about the environment at all. Nor would the
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government
's goal
be achieved
if the car manufacturers do not produce more compact cars for the market.
In other words
, the
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government
alone cannot solve the
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problem
of environment. It takes the collaborative efforts from
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individual
and corporate
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citizens
to
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improve
the situation.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that the
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government
should take the responsibility to lead the society in addressing the
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problems
of
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environmental
pollution as it has the power and resources necessary to do
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so
. Nonetheless,
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individual
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and private
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companies
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have to
be engaged
if the
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government
is to accomplish anything.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Environmental problems should be solved by the government instead of individuals and private companies. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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