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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? v.1

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. How do you think space exploration will change in the future? v. 1
Nowadays the role of space exploration in the world is widely debated, with some people claiming that it has had less to do with international effort than national pride. However, I do not accept this reason, to a certain degree since recent efforts involved space exploitation have been gradually evolved and not limited within basic meanings, and this essay will discuss the alteration of space exploration in the future. Firstly, back to the 1960s space expedition was used to show the greatness of the country. The brightest example of this is the space race between the United States of America and the USSR. It all started after world war 2 when the Soviet Union declared in the USA that when the Soviet Union responded to the US announcement four days earlier of intent to launch artificial satellites for the International Geophysical Year, by declaring they would also launch a satellite soon. The race continued until when the US has succeeded to send Neil Armstrong to the moon. Secondly, powerful countries tend to show their power to the other nations, because they will obtain more respect and benefit from that. Nevertheless, today exists a lot of international space programs that have common aims. For instance, the International Space Station is a joint project between five participating space agencies. Furthermore, each agencies from different countries cooperate. For example, the agency of Russia provides food for every person in ISS, Japan gives technology, etc. As seen, this search needs enormous funding, so that if a nation only obsesses about their pride in this exploration will fail. Having said that, there are still some projects like the idea of colonizing Mars. Even if the United States alone are fully capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to make that venture an isolated effort. The United States must be open enough to work with other nations not only for even higher efficiency, but also for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth. In the future, I think travel to outside Earth will be common for ordinary people who do not have basic as a cosmonaut. Next-generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about move half of the people on Earth to live on Mars. To sum up, the nations of the world must move toward global unification, and the cooperation in space will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, it will be easier to investigate space.
Nowadays the role of
space
exploration in the world is
widely
debated, with
some
people
claiming that it has had less to do with
international
effort than national pride.
However
, I do not accept this reason, to a certain degree since recent efforts involved
space
exploitation have been
gradually
evolved and not limited within basic meanings, and this essay will discuss the alteration of
space
exploration in the future.

Firstly
, back to the 1960s
space
expedition was
used
to
show
the greatness of the country. The brightest example of this is the
space
race between the United States of America and the USSR. It all
started
after
world war 2
when the Soviet Union declared in the USA that when the Soviet Union responded to the US announcement four days earlier of intent to launch artificial satellites for the
International
Geophysical Year, by declaring they would
also
launch a satellite
soon
. The race continued until when the US has succeeded to
send
Neil Armstrong to the moon.
Secondly
, powerful countries tend to
show
their power to the other
nations
,
because
they will obtain more respect and benefit from that.

Nevertheless
,
today
exists
a lot of
international
space
programs that have common aims.
For instance
, the
International
Space
Station is a joint project between five participating
space
agencies.
Furthermore
, each
agencies
from
different
countries cooperate.
For example
, the agency of Russia provides food for every person in ISS, Japan gives technology, etc. As
seen
, this search needs enormous funding,
so
that if a
nation
only
obsesses about their pride in this exploration will fail.

Having said that, there are
still
some
projects like the
idea
of colonizing Mars. Even if the United States alone are
fully
capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to
make
that venture an isolated effort. The United States
must
be open
enough
to work with other
nations
not
only
for even higher efficiency,
but
also
for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth.

In the future, I
think
travel to outside Earth will be common for ordinary
people
who do not have basic as a cosmonaut.
Next
-generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about
move
half of the
people
on Earth to
live
on Mars.

To sum up, the
nations
of the world
must
move
toward global unification, and the cooperation in
space
will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, it will be easier to investigate
space
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. How do you think space exploration will change in the future? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
419 words
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