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english is becoming the most prominent language in the world. Is this a positive or negative development? v.1

english is becoming the most prominent language in the world. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1
It is a fact that English is in an outstanding position in the world as it is used globally nowadays. This has caused people to think about whether it is beneficial to have an exclusive language worldwide. This development/ trend is positive thanks to the benefits which have been brought to human life. It is clear that to communicate in one global language would bring about many advantages for the whole society from each individual to the government. One evident strength of each person is that it would reduce the language barrier, thereby encouraging people's confidence in interacting with others from different areas of the world. Many people, especially the elderly, may no longer be afraid of foreign languages and can freely travel everywhere. In addition, governments can easily enhance diplomatic activities and discussions with better understanding. This would lead to numerous subsequent outcomes, such as saving national budget from reducing enormous translation and interpretation costs of international meetings and conferences. Also, this development will lead to benefits in various areas, especially economics, education and culture. First, English as a global language would help to strengthen trade facilitation among nations, thereby developing healthier economies. Second, when the flow of information is no longer deterred by different languages, cross-border information exchanges would happen more frequently and knowledge would be delivered more accurately without problems in translation. Last but not least, cultural and religious discrimination can be reduced to some extent, if all people in the world communicate in the same language. In conclusion, globalisation in terms of language would show the effects on the positive side. Individuals and governments will be beneficial through better cross-national communications. Besides, there are many plus points in economics, education and culture terms.
It is a fact that English is in an outstanding position in the world as it is
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used
globally nowadays. This has caused
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about whether it is beneficial to have an exclusive
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language
worldwide. This development/ trend is
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positive
thanks to the benefits which have
been brought
to human life.

It is
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clear
that to communicate in one global
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language
would bring about
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many
advantages for the whole society from each individual to the
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government
. One evident strength of each person is that it would
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reduce
the
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language
barrier, thereby encouraging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's confidence in interacting with others from
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different
areas of the world.
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Many
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people
,
especially
the elderly, may no longer be afraid of foreign
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languages
and can
freely
travel everywhere.
In addition
,
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governments
can
easily
enhance diplomatic activities and discussions with better understanding. This would lead to numerous subsequent outcomes, such as saving national budget from reducing enormous translation and interpretation costs of international meetings and conferences.

Also
, this development will lead to benefits in various areas,
especially
economics, education and culture.
First
, English as a global
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language
would
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help
to strengthen trade facilitation among nations, thereby developing healthier economies. Second, when the flow of information is no longer deterred by
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different
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languages
, cross-border information exchanges would happen more
frequently
and knowledge would
be delivered
more
accurately
without problems in translation. Last
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but
not least, cultural and religious discrimination can be
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reduced
to
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some
extent, if all
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people
in the world communicate in the same language.

In conclusion
,
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globalisation
in terms of
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language
would
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show
the effects on the
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positive
side. Individuals and
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governments
will be beneficial through better cross-national communications.
Besides
, there are
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many
plus points in economics, education and culture terms.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay english is becoming the most prominent language in the world. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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