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Educationalists think that international exchange visits are important for teenage school students. Do you agree? v.1

Educationalists think that international exchange visits are important for teenage school students. Do you agree? v. 1
Different countries have plethora of approaches towards education. Pedagogies believe that an overseas exchange visit is important for school teenagers. I agree with this notion because students can acquire foreign method and language. Which will enhance their skills. To begin with, The First and foremost reason for my agreement is because of technique which will be acquired by applicants when they go to another nation on an exchange program. Usually host country has their traditional method which is followed from generation and it is designed by the educationalist long time ago which are also good. But there are students who are exceptional and when they learn the overseas method they shall further excel. For instance, my friend John was offered an opportunity to pursue last year in Canada and from this program he acquires the smart technique. Which he applied in his examination and was ranked first in the entire country. Therefore, it not only benefited in school but also used this technique in his higher education. Furthermore, the positive feature which is obtained by applicants for this program is that it enabled in acquiring the foreign language. Student when they were in host country the language is usually spoken in the native language for informal conversation and formally during school hours. Hence it was not helpful in master the language throughout. Therefore, Student when they land on foreign land they need to communicate with foreign language only. Thus continuous speaking in their language has mastered student in English which has assisted in higher studies. For instance, John English was intermediate level in secondary school and after return from abroad after finishing the program has made him advance user. Therefore, this trip was highly beneficial in advancing Johns language skills. In conclusion, overseas learning technique and language skill are 2 main advantages which is acquired in foreign program and due to this I strongly agree with the notion. Thus, benefits of the students exchangeprogram far outweigh the drawbacks.
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. Which will enhance their
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skills
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technique
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program
.
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host
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country
has their traditional method which
is followed
from generation and it
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good
.
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there are
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students
who are exceptional and when they learn the overseas method they shall
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excel.
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, my friend John
was offered
an opportunity to pursue last year in Canada and from this
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program
he acquires the smart
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. Which he applied in his examination and
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first
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.
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in his higher education.

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feature which
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is that it enabled in acquiring the
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foreign
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language
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when they were in host
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when they land on
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has mastered
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in English which has assisted in higher studies.
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, John English was intermediate level in secondary
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school
and after return from abroad after finishing the
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program
has made him advance user.
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, this trip was
highly
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language
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skills
.

In conclusion
, overseas learning
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technique
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language
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skill
are 2 main advantages which
is acquired
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foreign
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program
and due to this I
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agree
with the notion.
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far outweigh the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Educationalists think that international exchange visits are important for teenage school students. Do you agree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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