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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter • describe a news story in your country • explain why people are interested in it • say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear. . . , You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words. v.1

You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter • describe a news story in your country • explain why people are interested in it • say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear. . . , v. 1
Dear Jannett, I hope you are doing well. I received your letter inquiring about the new Hydro Runner Bike named, “Wike’”. I must admit, it is one of the finest and creative technical projects that is doing wonders in my country, ever since its launch last month. Being an engineering student, I understand your sheer interest in this new development and would like to answer your queries accordingly. Thomas Evary is a young boy aged 27 who decided to build a two wheeled bike that completely operates by energy generated via water. He published his draft idea in his final year project, but the practical execution took 3 years to complete. I must admit that’s rather short period for such an innovative invention. General public in my country demonstrated keen interest in Wike because it is extremely cost efficient and pollution free. It neither emits carbon monoxide nor any other harmful gasses that pollutes the air. Thomas is being offered $200, 000 USD to sell his idea to an automotive company in Germany, so they can manufacture these bikes at a commercial level and make it readily available to people across the globe. They have also promised to keep the selling price lower than expected as a gesture to promote their corporate social responsibility towards global warming and climate change. In my opinion, I think it is a great initiative and even better technological development. We as engineering students can take ideas from this project and come up with something similar yet unique, such as a Solar Runner Bike. Let me know what you think of this and we can plan something together. Take care of yourself, hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Anna
Dear
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Jannett
,

I hope you are doing well. I received your letter inquiring about the new Hydro Runner Bike named, “
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Wike
’”.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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must
admit, it is one of the finest and creative technical projects
that is
doing wonders in my country, ever since its launch
‘last month’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last month
. Being an engineering student, I understand your sheer interest in this new development and would like to answer your queries
accordingly
.

Thomas
Possible spelling mistake found.
Evary
is a young boy aged 27 who decided to build a two wheeled bike that completely operates by energy generated via water. He published his draft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
in his final year project,
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but
the practical execution took 3 years to complete. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
admit that’s
rather
short period for such an innovative invention.

Consider using "public".
General public
in my country demonstrated keen interest in
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Wike
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because
it is
extremely
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
cost efficient
and pollution free. It neither emits carbon monoxide nor any other harmful gasses that pollutes the air. Thomas is
being offered
$200, 000 USD to sell his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to an automotive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in Germany,
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so
they can manufacture these bikes at a commercial level and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it
readily
available to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
across the globe. They have
also
promised to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the selling price lower than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
as a gesture to promote their corporate social responsibility towards global warming and climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is a great initiative and even better technological development. We as engineering students can take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
from this project and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with something similar
yet
unique, such as a Solar Runner Bike.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know what you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
this and
we can plan something together.

Take care of yourself, hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Anna
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter • describe a news story in your country • explain why people are interested in it • say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear. . . , v. 1

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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