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Education Job FairSaturday, October 9 9: 00 a. m. -12: 00 p. m. Washington CenterThe University of the Rockies has been offering our Placement Abroad Services for prospective teachers since 1980. This program is sponsored by the University of the Rockies' v.1

Education Job FairSaturday, October 9 9: 00 a. m. -12: 00 p. m. Washington CenterThe University of the Rockies has been offering our Placement Abroad Services for prospective teachers since 1980. This program is sponsored by the University of the Rockies' v. 1
It is argued that the most effective method of reducing crime is giving jail imprisonment for a long period of time. However, some people think there are existed another method to decrease the criminal quantity. Long sentences might stop only some minor criminals; it is unlikely that a majority of felony would be committed anyways. This essay will consider why eventually only few crime types will be reduced. Long confinement would help to stop essential crimes because human does not want to be convicted for a continuous period of time and destroy their whole life. In China, for example, minor crimes are very rarely because of the severe law. Chinese has the lowest rate of theft, shoplifting, burglaries and robberies. In addition, for these kinds of crime, human might spend 10 or even 20 years in the jail. That is why, long sentence may cut minor offences which is about 70% of the crime. Conversely, criminals, who committed a major crime, do not afraid long incarceration. These people do not care about punishment and they know in advance that it may be higher penalty. For instance, in the United States of America exist capital punishment, however every year, hundreds guilty murders, terrorists are under death penalty and hundred thousand get whole life isolation. For these reasons, long imprisonment does not work properly with major criminal and there must be other ways to reduce felony. To conclude, it is increasingly likely that longer penalty will cut felony. Long custody will eventually fall minor atrocities while it will not affect to the major criminals. Ultimately, most crime will be reduced by long sentences.
It
is argued
that the most effective method of reducing
crime
is giving jail imprisonment for a
long
period of time.
However
,
some
people
think
there
are existed
another method to decrease the
criminal
quantity.
Long
sentences might
stop
only
some
minor
criminals
; it is unlikely that a majority of felony would
be committed
anyways. This essay will consider why
eventually
only
few
crime
types will be
reduced
.

Long confinement would
help
to
stop
essential
crimes
because
human does not want to
be convicted
for a continuous period of time and
destroy
their whole life. In China,
for example
,
minor
crimes
are
very
rarely
because
of the severe law. Chinese has the lowest rate of theft, shoplifting, burglaries and robberies.
In addition
, for these kinds of
crime
, human might spend 10 or even 20 years in the jail.
That is
why,
long
sentence may
cut
minor
offences
which is about 70% of the crime.

Conversely
,
criminals
, who committed a major
crime
, do not afraid
long
incarceration. These
people
do not care about
punishment and
they know in advance that it may be higher penalty.
For instance
, in the United States of America exist capital punishment,
however
every year, hundreds guilty murders, terrorists are under death penalty and
hundred
thousand
get
whole life isolation. For these reasons,
long
imprisonment does not work
properly
with major
criminal
and there
must
be other ways to
reduce
felony.

To conclude
, it is
increasingly
likely that longer penalty will
cut
felony.
Long
custody will
eventually
fall
minor
atrocities while it will not affect to the major
criminals
.
Ultimately
, most
crime
will be
reduced
by
long
sentences.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Education Job FairSaturday, October 9 9: 00 a. m. -12: 00 p. m. Washington CenterThe University of the Rockies has been offering our Placement Abroad Services for prospective teachers since 1980. This program is sponsored by the University of the Rockies' v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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