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In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the curr v.1

In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the curr v. 1
Exploration of the space by the humans is becoming controversial. In the previous century, when a human astronaut landed on the moon, he said that it was a big step for the mankind. However, some people said it made no difference in their daily lives. It is agreed that, exploring space is crucial for the mankind rather than not doing anything. Firstly, analysing the untouched territory might benefit humans with some rare substances found in abundance. For instance, these rare metals and minerals were found to have medicinal value in curing diseases like cancer. Further, such metals have a high price value and possessing such unique things indeed, makes a difference in the life of an individual. Therefore, by stepping on an unknown land, astronauts can analyse and study unfamiliar substances. Secondly, studying space can benefit the future generations because, the earth is facing ecological challenges like global warming. Moreover, certain places on earth have become inhabitable for the humans. Further, the earth can be at risk of meteorite collision which are unavoidable. For instance, millions of years ago, the dinosaurs became extinct after the earth had a massive collision with a meteorite. Overall, exploring this territory will be of help for the coming generations, who can survive on another planet which has the environment like earth. To summarise, exploring the space is important because of identifying the familiar or unfamiliar metals which might be found abundantly, as well as the next generations can be safely moved to another planet whenever the earth is in danger. Ultimately, all this is possible only by exploring the space.
Exploration of the
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space
by the
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humans
is becoming controversial. In the previous century, when a
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human
astronaut landed on the moon, he said that it was a
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big
step for the mankind.
However
,
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some
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people
said it made no difference in their daily
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lives
. It is
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agreed
that,
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exploring
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space
is crucial for the mankind
rather
than not doing anything.

Firstly
,
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analysing
the untouched territory might benefit
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humans
with
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some
rare substances found in abundance.
For instance
, these rare metals and minerals
were found
to have medicinal value in curing diseases like cancer.
Further
, such metals have a high price value and possessing such unique things
indeed
,
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makes
a difference in the life of an individual.
Therefore
, by stepping on an unknown land, astronauts can
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analyse
and study unfamiliar substances.

Secondly
, studying
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space
can benefit the future generations
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because
, the
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earth
is facing ecological challenges like global warming.
Moreover
, certain places on
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earth
have become inhabitable for the
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humans
.
Further
, the
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earth
can be at
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risk
of meteorite collision which are unavoidable.
For instance
, millions of years ago, the dinosaurs became extinct after the
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earth
had a massive collision with a meteorite.
Overall
,
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exploring
this territory will be of
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help
for the coming generations, who can survive on another planet which has the environment like earth.

To
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summarise
,
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exploring
the
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space
is
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important
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because
of identifying the familiar or unfamiliar metals which might
be found
abundantly
,
as well
as the
next
generations can be
safely
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moved
to another planet whenever the
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earth
is in
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danger
.
Ultimately
, all this is possible
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only
by
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exploring
the
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space
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the curr v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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