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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. v.3

Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. v. 3
Education is the best gift for the human to incline higher social statue, which means someone who is the inferior position in the society can assure to change their terrible situations as well as their human rights and, deteriorated social and economic infrastructures. However, although opportunities for education may release many negative things, especially economic problems, from weaker. All burdens of stress and hardness relevant to society always fetter human life. Thus, all things of society resolved by education are overestimated or do not accept the current situation. This essay will be written for two reasons. To begin with, unlike the past, education is not a key to escape from the poor class. As seen an example of that, there are so many employees having an academic background. This means educations are no longer attached by employers or business markets. So, It is better to find another way that may distinguish me from rivals than focusing on education. Another reason is that education price is too high to achieve the goal deserved as a successful life from society. For example, completing the total education course is annually 3000 pounds in a year, In the Korean version. For four years. Additionally, including living expenses, cost of transportation, cost of rent in a house, and so on, massive price is paid to students, althoughalthough they allege to do both work and study, which casts overburden on younger having a not rich family background. So most of them have debts which may threaten their life for the whole lifetime. Therefore, the analysis of educations to give hope to common people would make them spoiled and lead to worse situations. All things considered, education is not the only solution for the poorer to take from their miserable situation now. Therefore, the government and the social groups consider diverse methods for them such as finding new job or market, leading new technologies to them in acceptable with their characters and aptitudes
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is the best gift for the human to incline higher social statue, which means someone who is the inferior position in the
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society
can assure to
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change
their terrible
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situations
as well
as their human rights and, deteriorated social and economic infrastructures.
However
, although opportunities for
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education
may release
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many
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negative
things,
especially
economic problems, from weaker. All burdens of
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stress
and hardness relevant to
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society
always fetter human life.
Thus
, all things of
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society
resolved by
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education
are overestimated
or do not accept the
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current
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situation
. This essay will
be written
for two reasons. To
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begin
with, unlike the past,
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education
is not a key to escape from the poor
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class
. As
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seen
an example of that, there are
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so
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many
employees having an academic background. This means
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educations
are no longer attached by employers or business markets.
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So
, It is better to find another way that may distinguish me from rivals than focusing on
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education
. Another reason is that
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education
price is too high to achieve the goal deserved as a successful life from
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society
.
For example
, completing the total
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education
course is
annually
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3000 pounds
in a year, In the Korean version. For four years.
Additionally
, including living expenses, cost of transportation, cost of rent in a
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house
, and
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so
on, massive price
is paid
to students,
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althoughalthough
they allege to do both work and study, which casts overburden on younger having a not rich family background.
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So
most of them have debts which may threaten their life for the whole lifetime.
Therefore
, the analysis of
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educations
to give hope to common
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people
would
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make
them spoiled and lead to worse
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situations
. All things considered,
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education
is not the
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only
solution for the poorer to take from their miserable
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situation
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now
.
Therefore
, the
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government
and the social groups consider diverse methods for them such as finding new job or market, leading new technologies to them in acceptable with their characters and aptitudes
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. v. 3

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
325 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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